Instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics, governments should spend the money on programmes encouraging the public to be active and stay healthy. v.2
Instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics, governments should spend the money on programmes encouraging the public to be active and stay healthy. v. 2
The bureaucrats should spend the finance on energy projects to motivate and give well-being awareness to the people to lead a healthy life instead of putting money on athletes trainings. While I agree athletes training is essential in every country, I believe that the government definitely spend the finance for health programmes.
On the one hand, there are many reasons behind the way government spends credits on sports training. Firstly, it may possible to represent our country name in worldwide, if the athlete wins any medal in the Olympics. Secondly, not only academics, but also sports are necessary for people because they improve their fitness along with career aspects. For example, in 2017, The Hindu Times reported that the eminent sports star Sania won the gold medal in Olympic and represents the country name greatly
On the other hand, the fitness projects are important for people to maintain a healthy life without effect much communicating diseases. In addition, it provides well-being awareness in all areas like rural and urban areas. And specifically in recent years people prone to get many communicable diseases like cholera, leprosy and tuberculosis. If bureaucrats spend money on the fitness projects, it may possible to reduce these types of diseases. For example, AIDS infection has been controlled nowadays by conducting awareness programmes.
In conclusion, although, I agree that athletes training is an essential thing for the younger generation in recent years, I believe that health projects are necessary for people to maintain healthy for long life.
The bureaucrats should
spend
the finance on energy
projects
to motivate and give well-being awareness to the
people
to lead a healthy life
instead
of putting money on
athletes
trainings
. While I
agree
athletes
training
is essential in every country, I believe that the
government
definitely
spend
the finance for health
programmes
.
On the one hand, there are
many
reasons behind the way
government
spends
credits on sports
training
.
Firstly
, it
may possible
to represent our country name in worldwide, if the
athlete
wins any medal in the Olympics.
Secondly
, not
only
academics,
but
also
sports are necessary for
people
because
they
improve
their fitness along with career aspects.
For example
, in 2017, The Hindu Times reported that the eminent sports star
Sania
won the gold medal in Olympic and represents the country name
greatly
On the other hand
, the fitness
projects
are
important
for
people
to maintain a healthy life without effect much communicating diseases.
In addition
, it provides well-being awareness in all areas like rural and urban areas. And
specifically
in recent years
people
prone to
get
many
communicable diseases like cholera, leprosy and tuberculosis. If bureaucrats
spend
money on the fitness
projects
, it
may possible
to
reduce
these types of diseases.
For example
, AIDS infection has
been controlled
nowadays by conducting awareness
programmes
.
In conclusion
, although, I
agree
that
athletes
training
is an essential thing for the younger generation in recent years, I believe that health
projects
are necessary for
people
to maintain healthy for long life.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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