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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.9

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 9
Government is an elective body which allocates revenue for the development of the nation. Some people proclaim that the authority should utilise more funds on railways as compared to roads. This essay will elaborate both the views in subsequent paragraphs with a meaningful conclusion. There are myriad why folks believe that the government should spend money on railways. But the most preponderant aspect of this trend is that trains are faster and cheaper as compared to others modes of transportation. It helps individuals to save their time and money. Another pivotal aspect of this trend is that the rails are ecofriedly with the environment as it creates less pollution. To exemplify, in India, in 2015, a survey was conducted by experts which showed that buses and public private vehicles are polluting the environment more which is not beneficial for human beings. However, there are certain points why people need better road. First of all, railway tracks are not linked to each and every part of the country. So, if the roads are properly constructed, masses should conveniently commute to their destination. Even thought trains are cheaper and faster, other vehicles can also be used by people's at the time of emergency. Apart from this, good road infrastructure is easily used by truck drivers to carry things from one place another. To recapitulate, according to the arguments aforementioned above one can reach to a conclusion that the government should equal amount of money for both roads and railways. It is basic need for individuals.
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Government
is an elective body which allocates revenue for the development of the nation.
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Some
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people
proclaim that the authority should
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utilise
more funds on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
as compared to
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roads
. This essay will elaborate both the views in subsequent paragraphs with a meaningful conclusion.

There are myriad why folks believe that the
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government
should spend money on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
.
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But
the most preponderant aspect of this trend is that trains are faster and cheaper
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as
compared to others modes of transportation. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
individuals to save their time and money. Another pivotal aspect of this trend is that the rails are
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ecofriedly
with the environment as it creates less pollution. To exemplify, in India, in 2015, a survey
was conducted
by experts which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
that buses and public private vehicles are polluting the environment more which is not beneficial for human beings.

However
, there are certain points why
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people
need better
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road
.
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First of all
,
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railway
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tracks
are not linked to each and every part of the country.
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So
, if the
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roads
are
properly
constructed, masses should
conveniently
commute to their destination. Even
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thought
trains are cheaper and faster, other vehicles can
also
be
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used
by
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people
's at the time of emergency. Apart from this,
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good
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road
infrastructure is
easily
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used
by truck drivers to carry things from one place another.

To recapitulate, according to the arguments aforementioned above one can reach to a conclusion that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should equal amount of money for both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
and
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railways
. It is basic need for individuals.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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