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Pets should be treated like family members. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons to support your opinion. v.2

Pets should be treated like family members. Give reasons to support your opinion. v. 2
Animals and people are created by the God, but they have different from behavior and ability. They can' t to think or to solve problems and to speak out with the others. If the God make them with perfectly, so animals and people will be rival each other. Since they have some of weakness, we should threat pets as well as family members. From my experience, I was addopted some of kitten in my house. Because I care and love them, so I treated them as my children. Having some of kitten is required more responsibility to fed, to cleaned their litterig box, to poured water into water box. Nevertheless, I felt fun to do that. I think that they might know who love them, and they will love back. For instance, my little kitten always follow me wherever I go in the house and they always wait me in back the door if I' m going to someplace. Those are figure out that they love their owner. Having kittens are given some of advantages, which was to reduce your stress from your work place. When you went back to home with tired face, you opened your door and saw that they would have tried to tell you something they feel with theirs language. It was funny that they acted to spoiled to you. they could approaching you and you might laugh with they do. Another pleasure things, when you played with them, you can used ball and made them to catch the ball. Both of you, doing exercise. Another example to explain that pets will be faith to their master, there are in Japan, when the dog had to wait their master, even though he didn' t know that the master was died. Hachiko statue in Japan that show to you for maintain your pets. In conclusion, I would say that pets should be treated like family members and should be given proper food, shelter and health care. It is our duty as human to take care of them.
Animals and
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people
are created
by the God,
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but
they have
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different
from behavior and ability. They
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can&
#039; t to
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think
or to solve problems and to speak out with the others. If the God
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make
them with
perfectly
,
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so
animals and
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people
will be rival each other. Since they have
Consider using "some weakness" or "some of the weakness".
some of weakness
, we should threat pets
as well
as family members.

From my experience, I was
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addopted
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some
of
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kitten
in my
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house
.
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Because
I care and
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love
them,
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so
I treated them as my children. Having
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some
of
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kitten
is required
more responsibility to fed, to cleaned their
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litterig
box, to poured water into water box.
Nevertheless
, I felt fun to do that. I
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think
that they might know who
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
love
them, and they will
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love
back.
For instance
, my
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little
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kitten
always follow me wherever I go in the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
house and
they always wait me in back the door if
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I&
#039; m going
Did you mean "too"?
to
someplace. Those are figure out that they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
love
their owner.

Having
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kittens
are
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given
After 'some of', you should use 'the' ("some of the advantages") or simply say "some advantages".
some of advantages
, which was to
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reduce
your
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stress
from your work place. When you went back to home with tired face, you opened your door and
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saw
that they would have tried to
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tell
you something they feel with theirs language. It was
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funny
that they acted to spoiled to you.
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they
could
The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: "approach"
approaching
you and you might laugh with they do. Another pleasure things, when you played with them, you can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "use"
used
ball and made them to catch the ball. Both of you, doing exercise. Another example to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
that pets will be faith to their master, there are in Japan, when the dog had to wait their master,
even though
he
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didn&
#039; t know that the master was
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died
.
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Hachiko
statue in Japan that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
to you for maintain your pets.

In conclusion
, I would say that pets should
be treated
like family members and should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
proper food, shelter and health care. It is our duty as human to take care of them.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS essay Pets should be treated like family members. Give reasons to support your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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