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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant v.2

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The given table demonstrates information about poverty families’ proportion in six different types with total households in Australia in 1999. Overall, it could be clearly seen that about 1837 thousand Australian families were in poor status and their proportion of living was very low in the provided year. The category of sole parents had biggest readings of poverty of all other families, while single aged persons had the poorest testimony of life in all Australia. Moreover, single aged person households in proportion had 6 per cent of misery. In contrast, category without children had in 3 times more percentage of poverty at the same time. Couples with children had in 2 times better level of life than couples who had children with them (12%). It obvious that all households without children had less misery than families with children. In addition, it means that their children did not play any role in money.
The
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given
table demonstrates information about poverty
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families’
proportion in six
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different
types with total households in Australia in 1999.
Overall
, it could be
clearly
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seen
that about 1837 thousand Australian
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families
were in poor status and their proportion of living was
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very
low in the provided year.

The category of sole parents had
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biggest
readings of poverty of all other
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families
, while single aged persons had the poorest testimony of life in all Australia.
Moreover
, single aged person households in proportion had 6 per cent of misery.
In contrast
, category without
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children
had in 3 times more percentage of poverty at the same time. Couples with
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children
had in 2 times better level of life than couples who had
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children
with them (12%).
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It
obvious that all households without
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children
had less misery than
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families
with
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children
.
In addition
, it means that their
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children
did not play any role in money.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
152 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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