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An English speaking friend wants to spend a two week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice Write a letter to your friend In your letter offer to find somewhere to stay give advice about what to do give information about v.1

An English speaking friend wants to spend a two week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice Write a letter to your friend In your letter offer to find somewhere to stay give advice about what to do give information about v. 1
In today's age, common public generally makes efforts to copy the styles of the glorious personalities as they get so much affected from the magazines or tv shows they are watching owing to attraction towards the luxury life of their favourite ones. Stating my view I would say there is no vulnerable affect of the same until it goes up to an extent. Discussing the reasoning in the essay below. Firstly, there is no harm to copy styles or to follow the well established personalities as people are much attracted towards their lifestyle. Many people want to copy them just for the sake to look good as they watch them either, some want to opt to show off their wealth to their friends or society, however there is also the public who wants to copy them just to be happy and satisfied. Sometimes there are also other facts which make audience to image another, such as their experiences, their losses and of course their sayings about life also people came to know about life experiences and much more. On the other hand, every person who wants to be like well known personalities should not forget about hard work, determination, and also the sacrifices they made to be that kind. There are many things towards which an ordinary person is not familiar with as to be honourable people sacrifices their time or family sometimes. And of course we can copy them up to an extent because normal person has not well earned as any great living and to copy Can make them compromise their living standards. In conclusion, I would say any common can copy the styles of the famous personalities, but that would make them vulnerable if they will be attracted to copy their standards of living.
In
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today
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makes
efforts to
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copy
the styles of the glorious personalities as they
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get
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so
much
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affected
from the magazines or
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tv
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shows
they are watching owing to attraction towards the luxury life of their
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favourite
ones. Stating my view I would say there is no vulnerable affect of the same until it goes up to an extent. Discussing the reasoning in the essay below.

Firstly
, there is no harm to
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copy
styles or to follow the well established personalities as
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people
are much attracted towards their lifestyle.
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Many
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people
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want
to
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copy
them
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just
for the sake to look
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good
as they
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watch
them either,
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some
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want
to opt to
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show
off their wealth to their friends or society,
however
there is
also
the public who
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wants
to
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copy
them
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just
to be happy and satisfied.
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Sometimes
there are
also
other facts which
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audience to image another, such as their experiences, their losses and
of course
their sayings about life
also
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people
came to know about life experiences and much more.

On the other hand
, every person who
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wants
to be like well known personalities should not forget about
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hard
work, determination, and
also
the sacrifices they made to be that kind. There are
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many
things towards which an ordinary person is not familiar with as to be
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honourable
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people
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sacrifices
their time or family
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sometimes
. And
of course
we can
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copy
them up to an extent
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because
normal person has not
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well earned
as any great living and to
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copy
Can
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make
them compromise their living standards.

In conclusion
, I would say any common can
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copy
the styles of the
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famous
personalities,
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but
that would
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make
them vulnerable if they will
be attracted
to
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copy
their standards of living.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay An English speaking friend wants to spend a two week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice Write a letter to your friend In your letter offer to find somewhere to stay give advice about what to do give information about v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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