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2124 describe one of the shopping centers you often go towhere is the shopping centerhow often do you go to the centerwhy do you often go to it and its characteristics? v.1

2124 describe one of the shopping centers you often go towhere is the shopping centerhow often do you go to the centerwhy do you often go to it and its characteristics? v. 1
Type of weather liked by the people depends on their pattern of living. While some people think that living in the warmer area is more preferable, others prefer to live in the coldest place. This essay will consider both sides of argument in detail and put forward evidences why I like to live in the cold places as compared to warm places. First and foremost, living in the hot climate is more beneficial because it gives freedom to people wear light clothes and older people has less chances of getting ill. Firstly, the people who live in the warmer area can easily wear trendy and light weighted attires as compared to the people living in the cold climate. Additionally, they are able to show their physics and glamourous look easily. Furthermore, the second factor responsible for the like of warm place is the health of the aged persons, as these places are less prone to muscle or bone related problems. For instance, an article published in the newspaper shows that the people who live in the hot climate are healthier than the people living in the cold area. Thus, lightweight cloth wearing and enhanced health of older people are the major advantages of living in the hot climate. However, there are some people who likes living in the cold places because of these places are calmer and cost effective. Due to coldness, people prefer to spend most of their time inside their homes and office, which reduces the traffic on the roads along with less public crowd. In addition to this, people also do not go out much which also saves money because they do not spend most of their time in shopping as they do when the weather is hot. This affects the nation’s economy growth. For example, the cost of living in the warmest place is much more as compared to the cold ones. Therefore, if people want to live in calm and cost effective place, then cold place is the best option for them. In conclusion, which type of weather is the best option for lifestyle is debatable among the people. In my opinion, living in the colder area is more beneficial than the warmer area due to above reasons.
Type of weather liked by the
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depends
on their pattern of
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living
. While
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some
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people
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think
that
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living
in the warmer
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area
is more preferable, others prefer to
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live
in the coldest
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place
. This essay will consider both sides of argument in detail and put forward evidences why I like to
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live
in the
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cold
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places
as compared to warm places.

First
and foremost,
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living
in the hot climate is more beneficial
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because
it gives freedom to
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people
wear light clothes and older
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people
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has
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less
chances of getting ill.
Firstly
, the
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people
who
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live
in the warmer
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area
can
easily
wear trendy and light weighted attires as compared to the
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people
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living
in the
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cold
climate.
Additionally
, they are able to
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show
their physics and
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glamourous
look
easily
.
Furthermore
, the second factor responsible for the like of warm
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place
is the health of the aged persons, as these
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places
are less prone to muscle or bone related problems.
For instance
, an article published in the newspaper
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shows
that the
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people
who
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live
in the hot climate are healthier than the
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people
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living
in the
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cold
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area
.
Thus
, lightweight cloth wearing and enhanced health of older
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people
are the major advantages of
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living
in the hot climate.

However
, there are
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some
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people
who
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likes
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living
in the
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cold
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places
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because
of these
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places
are calmer and cost effective. Due to coldness,
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people
prefer to spend most of their time inside their homes and office, which
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reduces
the traffic on the roads along with less public crowd.
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to this,
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people
also
do not go out much which
also
saves money
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because
they do not spend most of their time in shopping as they do when the weather is hot. This affects the nation’s economy growth.
For example
, the cost of
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living
in the warmest
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place
is much more
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
as
compared to the
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cold
ones.
Therefore
, if
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people
want to
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live
in calm and cost effective
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place
, then
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cold
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place
is the best option for them.

In conclusion
, which type of weather is the best option for lifestyle is debatable among the
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people
. In my opinion,
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living
in the colder
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area
is more beneficial than the warmer
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area
due to above reasons.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay 2124 describe one of the shopping centers you often go towhere is the shopping centerhow often do you go to the centerwhy do you often go to it and its characteristics? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
373 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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