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Write a letter to your company manager saying that you want to leave the company. In your letter explain: – what you have learned while working for the company– whether you have enjoyed working for the company– what are your reasons for leaving the c v.1

Write a letter to your company manager saying that you want to leave the company. In your letter explain: – what you have learned while working for the company– whether you have enjoyed working for the company– what are your reasons for leaving the c v. 1
People give more priority to wearing trendy clothes. This essay agrees that the above mentioned trend is a negative development. This essay will, first discuss that in order to purchase fashionable clothes individuals spend a lion's portion of their salary and further, outline that trendy clothes are too revealing and difficult to carry. It is clear that people, in order to remain up to date will spend an indiscriminate amount of their salaries in buying these fashionable clothes. This is to say, people will spend their hard earned income without thinking and thus will not have enough money left for savings or investing in profitable schemes. As a result, their future will be uncertain. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times showed that more than 80 percent of people spend 65 to 70 percent of their salary in buying trendy clothes from showrooms. Apart from this, the fashionable clothes worn by movie actors and models are not only too reveling but very difficult to carry which is not possible for common people. In other words, it is not possible for normal people wear such clothes for functions or parties and sometime feel uncomfortable when wearing in public. As a consequence, despite of purchasing expensive dresses, because of lack of comfort they are stored in their wardrobes. To exemplify, a recent study conducted by The New York Times showed that more than 60 percent of people do not feel comfortable when wearing trendy clothes. To conclude, fashionable clothes are becoming very popular among people. However, the trend has drawbacks as people spend a large portion of their income in purchasing clothes and they do not feel comfortable in wearing revealing clothes.
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People
give more priority to wearing
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trendy
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clothes
. This essay
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agrees
that the above mentioned trend is a
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negative
development. This essay will,
first
discuss that in order to
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purchase
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fashionable
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clothes
individuals
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spend
a lion's portion of their salary and
further
, outline that
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trendy
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clothes
are too revealing and difficult to carry.

It is
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clear
that
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people
, in order to remain up to date will
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spend
an indiscriminate amount of their salaries in buying these
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fashionable
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clothes
. This is to say,
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people
will
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spend
their
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hard earned
income without thinking and
thus
will not have
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enough
money
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left
for savings or investing in profitable schemes.
As a result
, their future will be uncertain. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times
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showed
that more than 80 percent of
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people
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spend
65 to 70 percent of their salary in buying
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trendy
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clothes
from showrooms.

Apart from this, the
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fashionable
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clothes
worn by movie actors and models are not
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only
too reveling
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but
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very
difficult to carry which is not possible for common
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people
.
In other words
, it is not possible for normal
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people
wear such
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clothes
for functions or parties and sometime feel uncomfortable when wearing in public. As a consequence,
Did you mean "despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
despite of
purchasing expensive dresses,
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because
of lack of comfort they
are stored
in their wardrobes. To exemplify, a recent study conducted by The New York Times
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showed
that more than 60 percent of
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people
do not feel comfortable when wearing
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trendy
clothes.

To conclude
,
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fashionable
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clothes
are becoming
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very
popular among
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people
.
However
, the trend has drawbacks as
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people
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spend
a large portion of their income in purchasing
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
clothes and
they do not feel comfortable in wearing revealing
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clothes
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a letter to your company manager saying that you want to leave the company. In your letter explain: – what you have learned while working for the company– whether you have enjoyed working for the company– what are your reasons for leaving the c v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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