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Write a letter to your friend who lives in another town and invite him/her to a party you are going to organise. In your letter, explain: – why are you holding the party– who are expected to be present at the party– invite your friend and give directi v.1

Write a letter to your friend who lives in another town and invite him/her to a party you are going to organise. In your letter, explain: – why are you holding the party– who are expected to be present at the party– invite your friend and give directi v. 1
Many people around the world are broke in life because they are very fear about that next process. Some people think it is best to accept a worse point while others, believes it would be better to try and improve such position. In this essay we will discuss the both views, after that my opinion is expressed in the conclusion In this world, only 5% of people are billionaire because they will not accept any worse circumstance, they will try to solve the problem in that circumstance rather than blaming consequently they will learn more knowledge which will enhance their future. However, problem which they face and solve leads to them better destination. Apart from that, these types of people have more self-confidence, faith and hope in their process. Although they fail more time than ever, they will continue to work in enthusiastically until they reach their objectives. For example, apple founder Steve jobs faced so many struggled in his college days and he was dropped out of college while so many them criticize his decision, although he does not allow that bad area. If people who are working in their passion, then they will try to improve themselves instead accepting bad spot Nevertheless, people who are not having that clear purpose in their heart, mostly affected mentally because they cannot improve themselves. This type of mindset never given solution and they have more fear about, their growth, whereas some people running the rat race for their family location. To conclude, some individuals are afraid to follow their heart because they think that would fail and this mindset, stop being brave in their activity in decision making. In my opinion we should try to improve ourselves in every condition rather accepting any worst condition. This will enhance our future.
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around the world are broke in life
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they are
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fear about that
next
process.
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Some
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people
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think
it is best to accept a worse point while others, believes it would be better to
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try and
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improve
such position. In this essay we will discuss the both views, after that my opinion
is expressed
in the
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conclusion


In this world,
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only
5% of
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people
are billionaire
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because
they will not accept any worse circumstance, they will try to solve the problem in that circumstance
rather
than blaming
consequently
they will learn more knowledge which will enhance their future.
However
, problem which they face and solve leads to them better destination. Apart from that, these types of
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people
have more self-confidence, faith and hope in their process. Although they fail more time than ever, they will continue to work in
enthusiastically
until they reach their objectives.
For example
,
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apple
founder
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Steve jobs
faced
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so
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many
struggled in his college
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days and
he
was dropped
out of college while
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so
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many
them criticize his decision, although he does not
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allow
that
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bad
area. If
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people
who are working in their passion, then they will try to
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improve
themselves
instead
accepting
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bad
spot

Nevertheless
,
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people
who are not having that
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clear
purpose in their heart,
mostly
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affected
mentally
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because
they cannot
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improve
themselves. This type of mindset never
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given
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solution and
they have more fear about, their growth, whereas
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some
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people
running the rat race for their family location.

To conclude
,
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some
individuals are afraid to follow their heart
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because
they
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think
that would fail and this mindset,
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stop
being brave in their activity in
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decision making
. In my opinion we should try to
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improve
ourselves in every condition
rather
accepting any worst condition. This will enhance our future.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Write a letter to your friend who lives in another town and invite him/her to a party you are going to organise. In your letter, explain: – why are you holding the party– who are expected to be present at the party– invite your friend and give directi v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
299 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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