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A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiter and waitress in your local newspaper. -explain what you are currently doing-describe your suitability for this area of work-say when you can attend an interview v.1

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiter and waitress in your local newspaper. -explain what you are currently doing-describe your suitability for this area of work-say when you can attend an interview v. 1
Art is gaining more popularity in the current scenario. The government is also putting extra efforts and money to encourage this essential skill with the expectation of having more artists for the future. Although some people argue that the regulatory bodies should focus more on imparting the better service to the community by avoiding another unnecessary spending to create a better nation, I completely disagree with the statement and believe that the art should continuously be encouraged which helps in gaining national identity in the field of art and bringing economy of the nation. The local council spends tons of money on public welfare. Then also, some demands more investment by the government on public services such as for building a road. According to them, directing money towards improving the betterment of the pubic may lead to more comfort and security to the public rather than spending for the entertainment purposes. For example, the Indian government spent billions of dollars on building a statue of liberty in the Ahmedabad, which could have been spent on developing a new bus route the rural areas. Although it is a negative to spend money on artistic building and skill, I believe there are also essential for the country in many ways. The greatest benefit of spending a little amount of money on art will help to obtain profit and importance. Better musicians and effective entertainment media will attract more tourism and create a national identity. For example, many people visit the Europe art museum for its unique design and collection, which helps in improving economically. In conclusion, the government is already allocating enough amount of money on public safety and security. Directing the little part of the total funding to the art will result in fruitful outcomes, therefore I agree that promoting and improving arts has more advantages than the disadvantages.
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is gaining more popularity in the
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current
scenario. The
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government
is
also
putting extra efforts and
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money
to encourage this essential
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
with the expectation of having more artists for the future. Although
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some
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people
argue that the regulatory bodies should focus more on imparting the better service to the community by avoiding another unnecessary spending to create a better nation, I completely disagree with the statement and believe that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
should
continuously
be encouraged
which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in gaining national identity in the field of
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art
and bringing economy of the nation.

The local council spends tons of
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money
on
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public
welfare. Then
also
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
demands more investment by the
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government
on
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public
services such as for building a road. According to them, directing
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money
towards improving the betterment of the
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pubic
may lead to more comfort and security to the
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public
rather
than spending for the entertainment purposes.
For example
, the Indian
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government
spent billions of dollars on building a
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statue of liberty
in the Ahmedabad, which could have
been spent
on developing a new bus route the rural areas. Although it is a
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negative
to spend
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money
on artistic building and
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skill
, I believe there are
also
essential for the country in
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many
ways.

The greatest benefit of spending a
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little
amount of
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money
on
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art
will
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help
to obtain profit and importance. Better musicians and effective entertainment media will attract more tourism and create a national identity.
For example
,
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many
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people
visit the Europe
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art
museum for its unique design and collection, which
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helps
in improving
economically
.

In conclusion
, the
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government
is already allocating
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enough
amount of
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money
on
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public
safety and security. Directing the
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little
part of the total funding to the
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art
will result in fruitful outcomes,
therefore
I
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agree
that promoting and improving
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arts
has more advantages than the disadvantages.
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IELTS essay A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiter and waitress in your local newspaper. -explain what you are currently doing-describe your suitability for this area of work-say when you can attend an interview v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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