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Write a letter to a city planning manager about demolition of a historical building in your area and say– Explain why it shouldn’t be demolished. – Suggest a future use for this building. – Recommend a way to raise money for repairs. v.1

Write a letter to a city planning manager about demolition of a historical building in your area and say– Explain why it shouldn’t be demolished. – Suggest a future use for this building. – Recommend a way to raise money for repairs. v. 1
In recent years, the important problem is that the annihilation of forest has a direct effect on the natural life. This essay discusses how disappearing forest impact on the environment, and to clear up this problem. The forest is the lung of the earth, so it has an important role of oxygen circulating. Increasing carbon dioxide level influences different issue our population and wildlife. The first result is that decreasing oxygen level might be change both micro and macro climate. The air and sea temperature will increase until over critical level. Because of that, the heat could eradicate vast of life forms on the planet. The second result is shrunk living space of animals. The animals support our life cycle; however, exhibition of animal life indirectly influence to us. In result of this, we might lose food resources such as fishes, meats and vegetables. The solution conserves green part of the earth. The important role attends to governments which will cope with deforestation. They can establish an association about the protection of endangered forest. The council can enact a forest legislation to the untouchable location on the planet. For example, some countries have more density trees under administrations. Thus, the council must amend this country's forest law and supporting with money. This is the only way the fixing this issue. Because everywhere do not have same tree face values such as Saudi Arabia, which has vast of dessert. To conclude, the mankind has same air and planet as to share. So, immediately, all govern should bring together under the same roof before getting over irreversible situation.
In recent years, the
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important
problem is that the annihilation of
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forest
has a direct effect on the natural
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life
. This essay discusses how disappearing
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forest
impact on the environment, and to
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clear
up this problem.

The
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forest
is the lung of the earth,
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so
it has an
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important
role of oxygen circulating. Increasing carbon dioxide level influences
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different
issue our population and wildlife. The
first
result is that decreasing oxygen level might be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
both micro and macro climate. The air and sea temperature will increase until over critical level.
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Because
of that, the heat could eradicate vast of
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life
forms on the planet. The second result
is shrunk
living space of animals. The animals support our
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life
cycle;
however
, exhibition of animal
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life
indirectly
influence to us. In result of this, we might lose food resources such as fishes, meats and vegetables.

The solution conserves green part of the earth. The
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
role attends to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
which will cope with deforestation. They can establish an association about the protection of endangered
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forest
. The council can enact a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forest
legislation to the untouchable location on the planet.
For example
,
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some
countries have more density trees under administrations.
Thus
, the council
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
amend this country's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forest
law and supporting with money. This is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
way the fixing this issue.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
everywhere do not have same
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tree
face values such as Saudi Arabia, which has vast of dessert.

To conclude
, the mankind has same air and planet as to share.
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So
, immediately, all govern should bring together under the same roof
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
getting over irreversible situation.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Write a letter to a city planning manager about demolition of a historical building in your area and say– Explain why it shouldn’t be demolished. – Suggest a future use for this building. – Recommend a way to raise money for repairs. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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