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You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs. Write a Jetter to the building manager. In your letter• describe the problem. • say what you think should be done about it. • ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem. v.1

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs. Write a Jetter to the building manager. In your letter• describe the problem. • say what you think should be done about it. • ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem. v. 1
Health is one of the most important aspects of human life. It is said that in the future, the average standard of health of individuals will deteriorate. I agree with this view. I believe that people will be dealing with decreased health because of the increasing popularity of fast foods and growing amount of stress that each person is facing his/her everyday life. To begin with, consuming fast foods on a daily basis contributes seriously to the decline of an individual’s health status. This is evident even in youngsters at present. For instance, the availability of fast food chains all over the country makes it very convenient for everyone to access these foods and encourage them to consume it on a daily basis. The result is people are prone to diseases related to cardiovascular disorders because of the high salt and high sugar content found in these fast food products. In addition, stress related disorders are also becoming more common nowadays. Everyone is complaining of being subjected to stress daily. Individuals who continually experience stress in their environment are likely to develop both mental and physical disorders. For example, employees who are overworked tend to develop headaches and stomach issues. To sum up, I agree with the argument that the average health standard of an individual will decrease in the future. Whilst some are becoming aware of the health issues that are emerging at present, the growing consumption of fast foods and the constant exposure to stress will likely contribute to the decline of the average standard of health of many people in the coming years.
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is one of the most
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important
aspects of human life. It
is said
that in the future, the average standard of
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health
of
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individuals
will deteriorate. I
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agree
with this view. I believe that
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people
will be dealing with decreased
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health
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because
of the increasing popularity of
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fast
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foods
and growing amount of
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stress
that each person is facing his/her everyday life.

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begin
with, consuming
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fast
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foods
on a daily basis contributes
seriously
to the decline of an
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individual’s
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health
status. This is evident even in youngsters at present.
For instance
, the availability of
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fast
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food
chains all over the country
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makes
it
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very
convenient for everyone to access these
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foods
and encourage them to consume it on a daily basis. The result is
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people
are prone to diseases related to cardiovascular disorders
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because
of the high salt and high sugar content found in these
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fast
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food
products.

In addition
,
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stress
related disorders are
also
becoming more common nowadays. Everyone is complaining of
being subjected
to
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stress
daily.
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Individuals
who
continually
experience
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stress
in their environment are likely to develop both mental and physical disorders.
For example
, employees who
are overworked
tend to develop headaches and stomach issues.

To sum up, I
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agree
with the argument that the average
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health
standard of an
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individual
will decrease in the future. Whilst
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some
are becoming aware of the
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health
issues that are emerging at present, the growing consumption of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fast
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
and the constant exposure to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stress
will likely contribute to the decline of the average standard of
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health
of
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many
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people
in the coming years.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs. Write a Jetter to the building manager. In your letter• describe the problem. • say what you think should be done about it. • ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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