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Would you rather eat at home or dine out at a restaurant? Give specific reasons, details and examples to support your response. v.1

Would you rather eat at home or dine out at a restaurant? Give specific reasons, details and examples to support your response. v. 1
Career has become an important element of an individual's life. It is argued by many people, that work takes a prime space in their life, and without a successful career their life would have no meaning. I partially agree with this statement, and will justify the same in my essay. To begin with, being successful in your career always provides a great sense of achievement and satisfaction. The people in todays world have become very competitive and work really hard to achieve their goals. When a person outperforms at work he feels more satisfied and also develops a proud feeling, whereas when a person fails at his task he feels, that his life has no meaning left. Hence, work achievement becomes a parameter for him to make his life meaningful. On the contrary, being successful can also result from being successful in personal life. This means an individual should be happy and content in life, this is also a way which could add more meaning to his life. Just by having a great career cannot make him content in life, if he continues to struggle in his personal life. For example, a top software engineer who was very successful in his career, committed suicide as he had a very disturbed married life, as he was not able to deal with the failure of his personal life. To conclude, career is important and it does take a vital space in the life of most people who thrive towards being successful, as it would add more meaning to their life. However, I would say people are more successful when they have a great balance between their personal and work life, and are able to be content in both spheres of life.
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IELTS essay Would you rather eat at home or dine out at a restaurant? Give specific reasons, details and examples to support your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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