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Eating Do you eat out a lot Do you eat healthy food How often do you eat with your family Do you prefer eating at home or at a restaurant v.1

Eating Do you eat out a lot Do you eat healthy food How often do you eat with your family Do you prefer eating at home or at a restaurant v. 1
Nowadays, in Modern society, Tradition and customs are in a state of flux. As a result of this disruptive culture there has been a drastic increase in parents preferring one or two children. In this essay, I shall examine the main advantages and potential drawbacks from parents and children's perspective having a small family. The benefits of smaller family are more obvious. Firstly on a very basic level, parents can spend a very minimal amount of money and spend more time with their offspring. In other words, the amount of expenditure would be very less with one or two children at home and this results in fewer demands on their time and pocket. For example, Recent survey held by local community states that large family monthly expenses tend to be four times the nuclear family at the ratio 4: 1. Secondly, Children would get more attention from their parents, which leads to effective mental growth and chances of being isolated is very minimal. On a contrary, Despite the advantages, there are few drawbacks, single parents often worry that there would be nobody to take care about their future welfare in old age. Perhaps most of them would be sent to parental care which are not luxurious. Furthermore, Children often tend to be more selfish as more love and attention would be provided by their parents as a consequence, they lack to socialize and inculcate other values like discourse, Empathy, Team spirit and tolerance. In conclusion, Although there are few potential limitations in small family, it is left to the individual to prefer any. In my opinion, small family outweigh the advantages then larger family as more focus and attention is provided to nurture which helps them to become a better citizen in society.
Nowadays, in Modern society, Tradition and customs are in a state of flux.
As a result
of this disruptive culture there has been a drastic increase in
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parents
preferring one or two
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children
. In this essay, I shall examine the main advantages and potential drawbacks from
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parents
and children's perspective having a
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small
family.

The benefits of smaller
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family
are more obvious.
Firstly
on a
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very
basic level,
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parents
can spend a
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very
minimal amount of money and spend more time with their offspring.
In other words
, the amount of expenditure would be
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very
less with one or two
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children
at home and this results in fewer demands on their time and pocket.
For example
, Recent survey held by local community states that large
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family
monthly expenses tend to be four times the nuclear
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family
at the ratio 4: 1.
Secondly
,
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Children
would
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get
more attention from their
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parents
, which leads to effective mental growth and chances of
being isolated
is
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very
minimal.

On a contrary, Despite the advantages, there are few drawbacks, single
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parents
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often
worry that there would be nobody to take care about their future welfare in
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old
age. Perhaps most of them would be
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sent
to parental care which are not luxurious.
Furthermore
,
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Children
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often
tend to be more selfish as more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and attention would
be provided
by their
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parents
as a consequence, they lack to socialize and inculcate other values like discourse, Empathy, Team spirit and tolerance.

In conclusion
, Although there are few potential limitations in
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small
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family
, it is
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left
to the individual to prefer any. In my opinion,
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small
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family
outweigh the advantages then larger
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family
as more focus and attention
is provided
to nurture which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
them to become a better citizen in society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Eating Do you eat out a lot Do you eat healthy food How often do you eat with your family Do you prefer eating at home or at a restaurant v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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