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WORK What do you do? What are your responsibilities? How many hours do you work each day? -Do you enjoy your work? -Is there some other kind of work you would rather do? -If you could change your job or profession, what would you do? -D v.1

WORK What do you do? What are your responsibilities? How many hours do you work each day? -Do you enjoy your work? -Is there some other kind of work you would rather do? -If you could change your job or profession, what would you do? -D v. 1
It is considered by many that a huge amount of people are not familiar with their neighbours, neither do they communicate with each other. In this essay I will discuss the reason for this and what we can do to improve the relationship with our neighbours. One possible cause is that the responsibilities in the households have shown an upward trend in their numbers. The reason for this is that parents are more concerned about the education and upbringing of their children with the thought to provide them a good future. For example, more and more parents are arranging tuitions and other classes to secure the brightest future possible for their child. This highlights the reduction in time we have available to spend with our neighbours. On the other hand, communicating in good and bad times with your surroundings is really important. The reason for this is that your relatives will be more empathizing with you during a situation and the chance to create a conflict will be lower. For instance, letting them know about celebrations gives them a feeling of acceptance. They will be prepared for the loud sound or music in the upcoming days. So, it is a significant way to decreasing the chance for any disagreements. To summarize, nowadays people have more priorities in life that other things had become less important. The relationship between the next doors is a great and effective way to experience a upward trend in the atmosphere to avoid any bad situation.
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is considered
by
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many
that a huge amount of
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people
are not familiar with their
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neighbours
, neither do they communicate with each
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other
. In this essay I will discuss the reason for this and what we can do to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the relationship with our
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neighbours
.

One possible cause is that the responsibilities in the households have shown an upward trend in their numbers.
The reason for this is
that parents are more concerned about the education and upbringing of their children with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
to provide them a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
future.
For example
, more and more parents are arranging
Possible spelling mistake found.
tuitions
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
classes to secure the brightest future possible for their child. This highlights the reduction in time we have available to spend with our
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbours' is British English.
neighbours
.

On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand, communicating in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
times with your surroundings is
really
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important
.
The reason for this is
that your relatives will be more empathizing with you during a situation and the chance to create a conflict will be
Did you mean "lowed", "lowered"?
lower
.
For instance
, letting them know about celebrations gives them a feeling of acceptance. They will
be prepared
for the loud sound or music in the upcoming days.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, it is a significant way to decreasing the chance for any disagreements.

To summarize
, nowadays
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have more priorities in life that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
things had become less
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
. The relationship between the
next
doors is a great and effective way to experience
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
upward trend in the atmosphere to avoid any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
situation.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay WORK What do you do? What are your responsibilities? How many hours do you work each day? -Do you enjoy your work? -Is there some other kind of work you would rather do? -If you could change your job or profession, what would you do? -D v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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