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Increase in Lab Hours Science majors need more time in the lab. Every science course has 1 lab hour for every 3 hours in class. The university should change this to at least 2 lab hours for every 3 hours in class. Students develop the skills necessary to v.1

Increase in Lab Hours Science majors need more time in the lab. Every science course has 1 lab hour for every 3 hours in class. The university should change this to at least 2 lab hours for every 3 hours in class. Students develop the skills necessary to v. 1
Some people say that the optimal method to receive information is journals. Nonetheless, some argue that they can obtain information more effectively through other media. From my point of view, I have completely come to an agreement that learning through other media will be the better option. On the one hand, the option learning through articles is appealing for several reasons. Firstly, it is undeniable that news on newspapers is more reliable than other kinds of media. Because newspapers are administered by government and verified by a professional team, the information is always neutral and accurate. Secondly, newspapers are the kind of media that is suitable for everyone, including elders, middle-aged people, and youngsters. In terms of elders, since they are familiar with newspapers, it is difficult for them to use the technology for other media. On the other hand, there are some reasons why I support the side of learning through other media. Firstly, other media brings a great deal of information, beside daily news, to people. For instance, in terms of social media or TV, they always update social skills, lifestyles, entertainment and scientific documents, which attract plenty of of audiences, especially teenagers. As a consequence, people can obtain other helpful information and teenagers have a better studying foundation. Secondly, other media updates, latest information and spread to people immediately. Thirdly, it is convenient for people to receive information at anywhere and anytime. For example, people can use their mobile phones to get updated while travelling or chatting with friends. To conclude, both schemes seem to have their own merits. However, I personally think learning news through other media is more effective when people are living in society 4. 0 - society of information and technology
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information
is journals. Nonetheless,
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. From my point of view, I have completely
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to an agreement that
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learning
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through
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other
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will be the better option.

On the one hand, the option
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learning
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through
articles is appealing for several reasons.
Firstly
, it is undeniable that news on
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newspapers
is more reliable than
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other
kinds of
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media
.
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are administered
by
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government
and verified by a professional team, the
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information
is always neutral and accurate.
Secondly
,
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newspapers
are the kind of
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media
that is
suitable for everyone, including elders, middle-aged
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people
, and youngsters. In terms of elders, since they are familiar with
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newspapers
, it is difficult for them to
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use
the technology for
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other
media.

On the
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hand, there are
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reasons why I support the side of
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learning
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through
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other
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media
.
Firstly
,
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other
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media
brings a great deal of
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information
, beside daily news, to
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people
.
For instance
, in terms of social
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media
or TV, they always update social
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skills
, lifestyles, entertainment and scientific documents, which attract
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plenty
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of of
audiences,
especially
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teenagers
. As a consequence,
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people
can obtain
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other
helpful
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information
and
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teenagers
have a better studying foundation.
Secondly
,
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updates,
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latest
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and spread to
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immediately.
Thirdly
, it is convenient for
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people
to receive
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information
at anywhere and anytime.
For example
,
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people
can
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use
their mobile phones to
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get
updated while travelling or chatting with friends.

To conclude
, both schemes seem to have their
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own
merits.
However
, I
personally
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think
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learning
news
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other
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media
is more effective when
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people
are living in society 4. 0
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society of
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information
and technology
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Increase in Lab Hours Science majors need more time in the lab. Every science course has 1 lab hour for every 3 hours in class. The university should change this to at least 2 lab hours for every 3 hours in class. Students develop the skills necessary to v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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