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Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. v.2

Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. v. 2
Before starting the discussion on the essential role of death penalty or life sentence, we have to think about its meaning, purpose and factors behind the crime. In our society, people do crimes for the sake of their needs and sometimes for fun and also for the satisfaction of their emotions. In my opinion, if we focus our attention on the causes which put the person on criminal-route then it will be very useful to take the prophylactic measure to stop the happening of crime. Death penalty is on the extreme of law enforcements and there are a lot many steps on the way to reflect the fear and respect of law. Criminals who kill others they do this not only for the sake of money but other factors like mental illness, deprived feelings, ignorance and cruel tradition also contributes. If our system of education detects these underlying factors in childhood then we can convert these lethal segments of society into useful stuff. Few countries have implemented the rule of capital punishment more aggressively and people over there are very frightened and depressed. Sometimes, powerful people take the opportunity to misuse the law against their enemies. We should invest more resources in education, law enforcement on minor crimes and try to punish little people for minor faults. For heinous crimes death penalty should be there but proceeding should be very fair to avoid human bias.
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think
about its meaning, purpose and factors behind the
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crime
. In our society,
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people
do
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crimes
for the sake of their needs and
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sometimes
for fun and
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for the satisfaction of their emotions. In my opinion, if we focus our attention on the causes which put the person on criminal-route then it will be
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very
useful to take the prophylactic measure to
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stop
the happening of crime.

Death penalty is on the extreme of
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enforcements
and there are a lot
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many
steps on the way to reflect the fear and respect of
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law
. Criminals who kill others they do this not
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only
for the sake of money
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but
other factors like mental illness, deprived feelings, ignorance and cruel tradition
also
contributes. If our system of education detects these underlying factors in childhood then we can convert these lethal segments of society into useful stuff.

Few countries have implemented the
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rule
of capital punishment more
aggressively
and
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people
over there are
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very
frightened and depressed.
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Sometimes
, powerful
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people
take the opportunity to misuse the
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law
against their enemies.

We should invest more resources in education,
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law
enforcement on minor
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crimes
and try to punish
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little
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people
for minor faults. For heinous
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crimes
death penalty should be there
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but
proceeding should be
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very
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to avoid human bias.
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IELTS essay Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
235 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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