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Without capital punishment (death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of more violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. v.1

Without capital punishment (death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of more violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. v. 1
It is argued that, the death penalty is needed to eradicate crime from the society. As there is no safety for one’s life and the number of brutal murders are incrasing. In my opinion, I agree with the idea of capital punishment because it creates a sense of fear in the mind of a criminal and at the same time state authorities should work on the permanent solution for these crimes. The only fear in anyone’s life is death, whether it is criminal or a normal person. By passing a strict law of the death penalty against violent doers. If they attempt to do big crimes such as sexual violence, murder. There would be the only option left for an accused is death. There are few countries enforced this death penalty, such as Soudi Arabia passed a bill of capital punishment for sexual violence and murder in 1967, the law was very simple state sherriff would behead the accussed person in front of judicial court after hearing. For the permanent solution, government official and well established doctor must work on the psychology of criminal mind. We get to know, why these people go on this destructive path. By doing this, we can have a solution in the early stage of that person and one can avoid doing such crimes. One of the best examples in the state of Telangana, India doctors and data scientists are now working on this project called “Violent Minds”. It is nothing but, reading the state of mind of violent criminals in every situation from their past while doing crimes by collecting data such as satisfaction, pleasure and necessity for doing violence. This information is being used by the police officers to council the small criminals and guiding a better way to lead a life. In conclusion, it is better to enforce the sentence till death to create a fear in criminals and also officials have to guide criminals in the early stage of their crime world.
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is argued
that, the death penalty
is needed
to eradicate
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crime
from the society. As there is no safety for one’s life and the number of brutal murders are
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incrasing
. In my opinion, I
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agree
with the
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idea
of capital punishment
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because
it creates a sense of fear in the
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mind
of a
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criminal
and at the same time
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state
authorities should work on the permanent solution for these crimes.

The
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only
fear in anyone’s life is death, whether it is
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criminal
or a normal person. By passing a strict law of the death penalty against violent doers. If they attempt to do
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big
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crimes
such as sexual violence, murder. There would be the
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only
option
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left
for an accused is death. There are few countries enforced this death penalty, such as
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Soudi
Arabia passed a bill of capital punishment for sexual violence and murder in 1967, the law was
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very
simple
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state
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sherriff
would behead the
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accussed
person in front of judicial court after hearing.

For the permanent solution,
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government
official and well established doctor
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must
work on the psychology of
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criminal
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mind
. We
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get
to know
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these
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people
go on this destructive path. By
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doing
this, we can have a solution in the early stage of that person and one can avoid
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doing
such
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crimes
. One of the best examples in the
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state
of Telangana, India doctors and data scientists are
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now
working on this project called “Violent
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Minds”
. It is nothing
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but
, reading the
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state
of
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mind
of violent
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criminals
in every situation from their past while
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doing
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crimes
by collecting data such as satisfaction, pleasure and necessity for
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doing
violence. This information is being
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used
by the police officers to council the
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small
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criminals
and guiding a better way to lead a life.

In conclusion
, it is better to enforce the sentence till death to create a fear in
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criminals
and
also
officials
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have to
guide
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criminals
in the early stage of their
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crime
world.
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IELTS essay Without capital punishment (death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of more violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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