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With the increased use of computers, education is being delivered online without teachers. It is likely that there would be no role of teachers in providing education in the future. Do you agree with this view? v.3

With the increased use of computers, education is being delivered online without teachers. It is likely that there would be no role of teachers in providing education in the future. Do you agree with this view? v. 3
It is not doubtful that with the introduction of computers, the process of delivering education has changed to a much greater extent. Though these digital devices have expedited the availability of data, they are not substitutes of learning process that happens by human interaction. In my opinion, it can be expected that role of teachers may change from classroom teacher to an online teacher, but complete disappearance of classroom sessions is not possible. To commence with, acquisition of knowledge with computers involves fun and learning at the same time. Merely touching these digital devices is an activity full of enjoyment for a child. Apart from this, software interactivity and relaxing attitude while learning from computer contribute to grasping knowledge in an effective way. For example, the availability of digital books and other software tools used at higher educational level provides the student ever accessible source of detailed information that otherwise was impossible in the past. On the other hand, though the increased complexity of intelligent software embedded in the digital material brings high quality education to the students, the need of human interactive sessions would always be present at least in the foreseeable future. For example, only a human teacher can help a student overcoming his shortcomings with individualised attention. Therefore, expertise of a teacher in explaining the complexity and clarifying doubt can hardly be mimicked by the computer, no matter how much sophisticated the software is. To conclude with, according to me, teachers who are the highly respected professionals in the society will continue to play the most important role in shaping the career as well as the character of the students so that they not only succeed in their life but become better human beings too.
It is not doubtful that with the introduction of computers, the process of delivering education has
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changed
to a much greater extent. Though these digital devices have expedited the availability of data, they are not substitutes of learning process that happens by
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human
interaction. In my opinion, it can be
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expected
that role of
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teachers
may
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change
from classroom
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teacher
to an online
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teacher
,
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but
complete disappearance of classroom sessions is not possible.

To commence with, acquisition of knowledge with computers involves fun and learning at the same time.
Merely
touching these digital devices is an activity full of enjoyment for a child. Apart from this,
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software
interactivity and relaxing attitude while learning from computer contribute to grasping knowledge
Consider replacing "in an effective way" with the adverb for "effective"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an effective way
.
For example
, the availability of digital books and other
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software
tools
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used
at higher educational level provides the
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student
ever accessible source of detailed information that
otherwise
was impossible in the past.

On the other hand
, though the increased complexity of intelligent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
embedded in the digital material brings high quality education to the
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students
, the need of
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human
interactive sessions would always be present at least in the foreseeable future.
For example
,
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only
a
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human
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teacher
can
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help
a
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student
overcoming his shortcomings with
Possible spelling mistake. 'individualised' is British English.
individualised
attention.
Therefore
, expertise of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teacher
in explaining the complexity and clarifying doubt can hardly
be mimicked
by the computer, no matter how much sophisticated the
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software
is.

To conclude
with, according to me,
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teachers
who are the
highly
respected professionals in the society will continue to play the most
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important
role in shaping the career
as well
as the character of the
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students
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so
that they not
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only
succeed in their life
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but
become better
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human
beings too.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay With the increased use of computers, education is being delivered online without teachers. It is likely that there would be no role of teachers in providing education in the future. Do you agree with this view? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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