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1- People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

1- People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
In today' s hectic life, it is an astonishing fact that people from all walks of life differ greatly in their attitudes towards attending university. It seems to me that, three arguments and advantages are highlighted in attending to university. Benefits such as sumptuous career preparation, experience and changing life, have motivated people to attend university. So, as Hollywood celebrities say, " Let' s cut to the chase. " Taking the proposed subject into account, the reason may shed some light on my point is that these days, most jobs require people who are educated and have good job skills. It goes without saying that people who want a well developed job have to study hard and at least graduate with a high education. Moreover as technology advances all over the world, more and more education is required of people. Also, there is no other place than a college where a student can get sophisticated education in order to be qualified to become a professional in a specific area. Another rationale that I do concur with the first perspective in the introductory paragraph is that college can gives me a wonderful experience. It is absolutely certain that it gives me opportunity to meet people different from those in my hometown. In addition education can bring happiness to the student. For example when a student has conquered a difficult mathematical problem, he savors the joy which learning has brought to him, and so he feels that he is the happiest man in the world. Last but not least attending college or university can change our life. As a case in point, to myself, I am a student from countryside. I am one of the few people who can attend college or university. Most of those who have not studied in college or university go to work early in a small factory in a small town or on a farm in their hometown. Just because I have taken higher education, I can get better chances to study or work in the capital of our country and quench my thirst for acquiring luxury life. Why? Good education gives me chances to change my life. To put it in a nutshell, in light of the previously discussed the career preparation, experience and changing life are prime factors to my propensity for attending university. If I could have a chance to attend, I do not have a bit of hesitation to do it.
In
today&
#039; s hectic
life
, it is an astonishing fact that
people
from all walks of
life
differ
greatly
in their attitudes towards attending
university
. It seems to me that, three arguments and advantages
are highlighted
in attending to
university
. Benefits such as sumptuous career preparation, experience and changing
life
, have motivated
people
to attend
university
.
So
, as Hollywood celebrities say,
&quot
;
Let&
#039; s
cut
to the chase.
&quot
;

Taking the proposed subject into account, the reason may shed
some
light on my point is that these days, most jobs require
people
who
are educated
and have
good
job
skills
. It goes without saying that
people
who
want a
well developed
job
have to
study
hard
and at least graduate with a high
education
.
Moreover
as technology advances all over the world, more and more
education
is required
of
people
.
Also
, there is no other place than a college where a
student
can
get
sophisticated
education
in order to
be qualified
to become a professional in a specific area.

Another rationale that I do concur with the
first
perspective in the introductory paragraph is that college can
gives
me a wonderful experience. It is
absolutely
certain that it gives me opportunity to
meet
people
different
from those in my hometown. In
addition
education
can bring happiness to the
student
.
For example
when a
student
has conquered a difficult mathematical problem, he savors the joy which learning has brought to him, and
so
he feels that he is the happiest
man
in the world.

Last
but
not
least
attending college or
university
can
change
our
life
. As a case in point, to myself, I am a
student
from countryside. I am one of the few
people
who
can attend college or
university
. Most of those
who
have not studied in college or
university
go to work early in a
small
factory in a
small
town or on a farm in their hometown.
Just
because
I have taken higher
education
, I can
get
better chances to study or work in the capital of our country and quench my thirst for acquiring luxury
life
. Why?
Good
education
gives me chances to
change
my life.

To put it in a nutshell, in light of the previously discussed the career preparation, experience and changing
life
are prime factors to my propensity for attending
university
. If I could have a chance to attend, I do not have a bit of hesitation to do it.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay 1- People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
408 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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