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checkingTB. A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment? v.2

checkingTB. A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment? v. 2
People like factories because they bring new jobs to a community. In my opinion, however, the benefits of a factory are outweighed by the risk. Factories cause pollution and they bring too much growth. In addition, they destroy the quiet lifestyle of a small town. That is why I oppose a plan to build a factory near my community. Factories cause smog. If we build a new factory, the air we breath will become dirty. Everything will be covered with dust. Factories also pollute rivers and streams. Our water will be too dirty to drink. The environment will hurt and people' s health will be affected by a factory. Some people say that more jobs will be created by a factory. However, this can have a negative result. Our population will grow quickly. Many new homes and stores will be built. There will be a lot of traffic on the roads. Fast growth can cause more harm than good. Our city will change a lot. It is a pleasant place now. It is safe and quiet. Everybody knows everybody else. If a factory brings growth to the city, all of this will change. The small-town feel will be lost. A factory would be helpful in someways, but the dangers outweigh the benefits. Our city would be changed too much by a factory. I cannot support a plan to build a new factory here.
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like
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factories
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because
they bring
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new
jobs to a community. In my opinion,
however
, the benefits of a
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factory
are outweighed
by the
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risk
.
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Factories
cause pollution and they bring too much growth.
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, they
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destroy
the quiet lifestyle of a
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small
town.
That is
why I oppose a plan to build a
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factory
near my community.
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Factories
cause smog. If we build a
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new
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factory
, the air we
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breath
will become dirty. Everything will
be covered
with dust.
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Factories
also
pollute rivers and streams. Our water will be too dirty to drink. The environment will hurt and
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people
say that more jobs will
be created
by a
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factory
.
However
, this can have a
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negative
result. Our population will grow
quickly
.
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new
homes and stores will
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traffic on the roads.
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growth can cause more harm than
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good
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Our city will
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change
a lot. It is a pleasant place
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now
. It is safe and quiet. Everybody knows everybody else. If a
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factory
brings growth to the city, all of this will
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change
. The
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small
-town feel will
be lost
.

A
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factory
would be helpful in someways,
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but
the
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dangers
outweigh the benefits. Our city would be
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changed
too much by a
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factory
. I cannot support a plan to build a
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new
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factory
here.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay checkingTB. A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
233 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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