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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends? To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.8

With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends? with this statement? v. 8
With the technological advances in the field of the internet, online communication has become one of the hottest topics. Many people believe that it will make loneliness go away from their life away as they can have more and more friends easily over the web. I partially agree with this statement. It connects people irrespective of the physical distance. It has provided communities with mediums such as Facebook, Twitter, etc. , to connect with people of similar interests. Connecting with new people from different cultures, helps in broadening the mindset of the person, which further suffices the psychological needs. Moreover, it is easy to make friends with people of similar interests. Another benefit is that it keeps friends and family connected with the individual, even when he/she is overseas. For example, a student who has gone for higher studies to some other country, can connect with their families over Whatsapp, Twitter, Facebook, VoIP calls, etc. , instantly. This instant connectivity will help the student to get the emotional support from family and feel better in times of need. However, I am contradictory of the view that no one will feel lonely. It is human to feel the need of physical proximity and have actual friends as well not just virtual ones. Any human mind needs people around physically, to grow and stay sane. For instance, a new born baby learns by watching parents, family friends, etc. The importance of face to face hearty conversations with friends and families cannot be neglected as it relieves the human mind of the worries. The advent of multiple social networking sites has made people addicted to them, therefore, there is very less or no time for actual communication with friends and family. In conclusion, I believe that online communication has indeed provided us with the opportunities to make new friends easily. But, this is not to be done at the cost of the actual friends who offer help in need. Hence, a good balance between actual and virtual friends is needed.
With the technological advances in the field of the internet, online communication has become one of the hottest topics.
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Many
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people
believe that it will
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make
loneliness go away from their life away as they can have more and more
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friends
easily
over the web. I
partially
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agree
with this statement.

It connects
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people
irrespective of the physical distance. It has provided communities with mediums such as Facebook, Twitter, etc.
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,
to connect with
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people
of similar interests. Connecting with new
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people
from
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different
cultures,
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helps
in broadening the mindset of the person, which
further
suffices the psychological
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needs
.
Moreover
, it is easy to
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make
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friends
with
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people
of similar interests. Another benefit is that it
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keeps
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friends
and
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family
connected with the individual, even when he/she is overseas.
For example
, a student who has gone for higher studies to
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some
other country, can connect with their
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families
over
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Whatsapp
, Twitter, Facebook, VoIP calls, etc.
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,
instantly
. This instant connectivity will
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help
the student to
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get
the emotional support from
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family
and feel better in times of need.

However
, I am contradictory of the view that no one will feel lonely. It is human to feel the
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need
of physical proximity and have
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actual
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friends
as well
not
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just
virtual ones. Any human mind
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needs
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people
around
physically
, to grow and stay sane.
For instance
, a new born baby learns by watching parents,
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family
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friends
, etc. The importance of face to face hearty conversations with
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friends
and
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families
cannot
be neglected
as it relieves the human mind of the worries. The advent of multiple social networking sites has made
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people
addicted to them,
therefore
, there is
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very
less or no time for
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actual
communication with
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friends
and family.

In conclusion
, I believe that online communication has
indeed
provided us with the opportunities to
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make
new
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friends
easily
.
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But
, this is not to
be done
at the cost of the
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actual
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friends
who offer
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help
in
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need
.
Hence
, a
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good
balance between
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actual
and virtual
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friends
is needed
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends? with this statement? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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