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With the development of modern transportation comes environmental problems. What possible solutions are there to these problems? v.1

With the development of modern transportation comes environmental problems. What possible solutions are there to these problems? v. 1
Many people are convinced that ecological problems ensue from the growth of new transportation systems. There are number of solutions that should be implemented to deal with environmental problems, appeared from the transportation development. The first effective solution is to establish law restrictions and penalties on a constructional works to overcome huge variety of problems united by the problem of non-allowed works for ecological reasons. By doing this, it will help to fit new transportation systems in a landscape, especially providing aesthetics and safeness for people due to the issues of correlating building methods to the natural factors around. Moreover, a great amount of finances will be saved as there are so many cases where building is not allowed at all. In addition, these constructions prove their unsuitability and turn out in unprofitable projects just wasting money on a long-term period of time. In other words, changes in policy of transportation development, when ecology equals law, will hand the opportunity of solving environmental problems. The second method of dealing with environmental problems is a financial aid from the government to the business sector that will prevent situations when companies build non-ecologically because it’s cheaper. Furthermore, tenders are one of the examples that demonstrates how companies will try to illustrate themselves ecological and will receive financial benefits for winning on these contests. Thus, money will reveal a new trend to have an ecological policy of building constructions for getting even more profit. In conclusion, there are ways to take care of environmental problems, presented in the ideas of penalties and state support. As a result, no financial and juridical reasons can remain, so the crucial synergy of these two methods will take an explosive effect.
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that ecological
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problems
ensue from the growth of new
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transportation
systems. There are number of solutions that should
be implemented
to deal with
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environmental
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problems
, appeared from the
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transportation
development.

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first
effective solution is to establish law restrictions and penalties on a constructional
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works
to overcome huge variety of
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problems
united by the
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problem
of non-
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allowed
works for ecological reasons. By doing this, it will
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help
to fit new
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transportation
systems in a landscape,
especially
providing aesthetics and safeness for
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people
due to the issues of correlating building methods to the natural factors around.
Moreover
, a great amount of finances will
be saved
as there are
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cases where building is not
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allowed
at all.
In addition
, these constructions prove their unsuitability and turn out in unprofitable projects
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just
wasting money on a long-term period of time.
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changes
in policy of
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transportation
development, when ecology equals law, will hand the opportunity of solving
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environmental
problems.

The second method of dealing with
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environmental
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problems
is a financial aid from the
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government
to the business sector that will
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prevent
situations when
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companies
build non-
ecologically
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because
it’s cheaper.
Furthermore
, tenders are one of the examples that demonstrates how
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companies
will try to illustrate themselves ecological and will receive financial benefits for winning on these contests.
Thus
, money will reveal a new trend to have an ecological policy of building constructions for getting even more profit.

In conclusion
, there are ways to take care of
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environmental
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problems
, presented in the
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ideas
of penalties and state support.
As a result
, no financial and juridical reasons can remain,
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so
the crucial synergy of these two methods will take an explosive effect.
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IELTS essay With the development of modern transportation comes environmental problems. What possible solutions are there to these problems? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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