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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.12

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 12
A transportation system is a mean by which material objects (animals, humans, and goods) are moved from one place to another. I am totally agreed that governments should consume more on railways instead of roads. In ancient times, people had used animals like horses and camels for travelling and even for transporting goods from one country to another. They had neither reliable nor efficient means of transportation until the invention of wheel in the 19th century. In the present world, wide range of methods, including roads, railways and air are used to exchange material objects. In developed countries, governments are spending a lot on all kinds of transport system. However, the popularity of the railways is expanding rapidly and now it is considered more reliable but cheapest way of transport in many parts of the world. This is because of the several facts like trains are always on time. They are free from traffic jam as there are separate tracks for railways in each country. Similarly, the existence of bullet trains and the underground train facility has made railway the most popular mode of travelling in modern developed countries. Therefore, it is recommended that governments must have to pay more attention towards railway Industry rather than roads which frequently demand repairing and maintenance. If the works on railways remained in progress, then railways will certainly become the most economic and safest mode of transportation in the near future. Thus, I strongly believed that governments must uplift railway standards by spending more of it rather than investing again and again on roads.
A transportation system is a mean by which material objects (animals, humans, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
) are
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moved
from one place to another. I am
totally
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agreed
that
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governments
should consume more on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
instead
of roads.

In ancient times,
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people
had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
animals like horses and camels for travelling and even for transporting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
from one country to another. They had neither reliable nor efficient means of transportation until the invention of wheel in the 19th century.

In the present world, wide range of methods, including roads,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
and air are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to exchange material objects. In
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developed countries
,
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governments
are spending a lot on all kinds of transport system.
However
, the popularity of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
is expanding
rapidly
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
it
is considered
more reliable
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but
cheapest way of transport in
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many
parts of the world. This is
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because
of the several facts like trains are always on time. They are free from traffic jam as there are separate
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tracks
for
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railways
in each country.

Similarly
, the existence of bullet trains and the underground train facility has made
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
the most popular mode of travelling in modern
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developed countries
.
Therefore
, it
is recommended
that
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governments
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
pay more attention towards
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
Industry
rather
than roads which
frequently
demand repairing and maintenance. If the works on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
remained in progress, then
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
will
certainly
become the most economic and safest mode of transportation in the near future.

Thus
, I
strongly
believed that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
uplift
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
standards by spending more of it
rather
than investing again and again on roads.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 12

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
261 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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