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With internet improvements, people can share views or opinions on certain goods or services that they have purchased. Is this a good or a bad thing? Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.5

With internet improvements, people can share views or opinions on certain goods or services that they have purchased. Is this a good or a bad thing? v. 5
Nowadayas, broadening internet networks, in addition to social medias popularity cause individuals comment on almost every commodity which has been bought. This improvement has its advantages and disadvantages. First breakthrough of this is that companies have to promote the quality of their products, and this would benefit majority of people. While in the past, people couldnot be aware of the quality of something they want to purchase unless someone in their family our friends had already bought that, today they can easily search on the internet and read previous customers' ideas from even other countries. As a result, firms know that in order to sell more goods, they have no choice except using high-quality materials and try producing compatible products. Another privilege is that different opinions and ideas could help new users find a proper solution for their possible problems when they want to use a device they bought for the first time. Besides, some functions of devices are not come in the instruction book, so without reading others' comments, the person who owns the device would not be informed of those functions. On the other hand, free access and ability to opine about everything results in some biased opinions, which could be given by opponent companies in order to diminish a company' s sale rate. In addition, usually quality is a subjective notion. For instance, a mobile phone could seem suitable for someone because of appearance, while for another one the speed of internet is important. Therefore, some ideas might be misguiding. In conclusion, I believe that view sharing about purchased goods and services is an improvement for human beings. This is because this process will eventually force producers to generate high-quality stuff, and also because it provides buyers the opportunity of using other customers' experiences.
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Nowadayas
, broadening internet networks,
in addition
to social medias popularity cause individuals comment on almost every commodity which has been
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bought
. This improvement has its advantages and disadvantages.

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breakthrough of this is that
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companies
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have to
promote the quality of their products, and this would benefit majority of
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people
. While in the past,
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people
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couldnot
be aware of the quality of something they want to
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purchase
unless someone in their family our friends had already
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bought
that,
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today
they can
easily
search on the internet and read previous
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customers&
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ideas
from even
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other
countries.
As a result
, firms know that in order to sell more
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goods
, they have no choice except using high-quality materials and try producing compatible products.

Another privilege is that
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different
opinions and
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ideas
could
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help
new users find a proper solution for their possible problems when they want to
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use
a device they
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bought
for the
first
time.
Besides
,
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some
functions of devices are not
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come
in the instruction book,
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so
without reading
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others&
#039; comments, the person who
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owns
the device would not
be informed
of those functions.

On the
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other
hand, free access and ability to opine about everything results in
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some
biased opinions, which could be
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given
by opponent
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companies
in order to diminish a
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company&
#039; s sale rate.
In addition
,
usually
quality is a subjective notion.
For instance
, a mobile phone could seem suitable for someone
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because
of appearance, while for another one the speed of internet is
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important
.
Therefore
,
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some
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ideas
might be misguiding.

In conclusion
, I believe that view sharing about
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purchased
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goods
and services is an improvement for human beings. This is
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because
this process will
eventually
force producers to generate high-quality stuff, and
also
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because
it provides buyers the opportunity of using
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other
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customers&
#039; experiences.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay With internet improvements, people can share views or opinions on certain goods or services that they have purchased. Is this a good or a bad thing? v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
297 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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