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According to the survey people in walled in certain professions are seen to be hornist what is the situation in your country and why v.2

According to the survey people in walled in certain professions are seen to be hornist what is the situation in your country and why v. 2
According to research, masses indulged in some business are doing be honest? As per as my views in my country it is depend on situation and person also. Because every people have different ways to grow up their business. I will discuss my views on upcoming paragraphs. There are many traders are in my country. Some people doing business be very honest. They will stand their Business for doing many efforts. But there are lots of traders they do not doing business to be honestly such as electrical business. There are many electronic equipment available in market but some traders do not provide actual warranty to customer they cheat the customer because sometimes you think was not working and the customer or come in particular shop that there will be purchase the product. but the trader like to customer that product is out of runty and now you will purchase new and the customer is innocent and they will follow the businessmen guideline and purchase new product. Leaping further after going the customer to businessmen will find out are there we go out and replace the production by company and they increase the profit in addition some doctor will give medicine to patient that will be very costly but the doctor have same medicine is low-cost. they do not do this because they are more profit. Any conclusion person should have honestly for generate a good business so the business are going good scale and create good the name and fame agitators are doing good business be hornist they definitely grow up their business
According to research, masses indulged in
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business
are
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be honest? As per as my views in my country it is
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depend
on situation and person
also
.
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Because
every
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people
have
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different
ways to grow up their
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business
. I will discuss my views on upcoming paragraphs.

There are
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many
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traders
are in my country.
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Some
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people
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doing
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business
be
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very
honest. They will stand their
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Business
for
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doing
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many
efforts.
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But
there are lots of
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traders
they do not
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doing
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business
to be
honestly
such as electrical
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business
. There are
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many electronic equipment
available in market
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but
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some
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traders
do not provide actual warranty to
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customer
they cheat the
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customer
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because
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sometimes
you
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think
was not working and the
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customer
or
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come
in particular
shop that there will be
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purchase
the product.
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but
the
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trader
like to
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customer
that product is out of runty and
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now
you will
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purchase
new and the
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customer
is
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innocent and
they will follow the businessmen guideline and
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purchase
new product.

Leaping
further
after going the
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customer
to businessmen will find out are there we go out and replace the production by
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company and
they increase the profit
in addition
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some
doctor will give medicine to patient that will be
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very
costly
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but
the doctor have same medicine is low-cost.
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they
do not do this
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because
they are more profit.

Any conclusion person should have
honestly
for generate a
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good
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business
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so
the
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business
are going
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good
scale and create
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good
the name and fame agitators are
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doing
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good
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business
be
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hornist
they definitely grow up their
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business
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS essay According to the survey people in walled in certain professions are seen to be hornist what is the situation in your country and why v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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