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With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. v.8

With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. v. 8
Use of the internet and smartphones has become a global phenomenon and each of us is dependent on these technological marvels in one or the other way. While there is a notion which asserts that widespread use of the internet, online communication and cellular messaging will replace the traditional form of face to face interaction, - I completely disagree with it. to begin with, the use of the internet and other latest communication technologies drive us to meet new people and contact the dear ones who stay far away. This can especially be true when one gets a chance to express his feelings via a text or phone call. To quote an example, Skype and Facebook have enabled people living in far flung areas to communicate effectively through video chats, thereby enabling us to contact more frequently with people we care about. This has not replaced the way we care and meet others, rather it has made it more convenient and frequent. While the advancement of technology might scale back in personal contact to some extent for a short term, the web can, in fact, enable the present and future generations to become more polarised towards seeing siblings, parents and mates in the long run. This can be easily visualised by taking into account that if we are to sustain the net as a tool to deliver our emotions and beliefs to the world,   we will need to picture proof gatherings, celebrations and events thereby obviating the need for face to face communication. Secondly, it is a well-acknowledged fact that 'the human is a social being' and it is to the credit of this physical presence that we as a species are able to harness long-term relationships, so its value cannot be undermined for times to come. Mere endorsing words of good character by texts cannot inculcate the right kind of virtue, thereby further laying emphasis on human presence for future is required. To conclude, by seeing both sides of the spectrum, it is clearly evident that the internet and text messaging will not make the face to face communication a footnote of the past.
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of the internet and smartphones has become a global phenomenon and each of us is dependent on these technological marvels in one or the other way. While there is a notion which asserts that widespread
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use
of the internet, online
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communication
and cellular messaging will replace the traditional form of
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interaction,
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I completely disagree with it.

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with, the
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of the internet and other latest
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technologies drive us to
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meet
new
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people
and contact the dear ones who stay far away. This can
especially
be true when one
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gets
a chance to express his feelings via a text or phone call. To quote an example, Skype and Facebook have enabled
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people
living in
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far flung
areas to communicate
effectively
through video chats, thereby enabling us to contact more
frequently
with
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people
we care about. This has not replaced the way we care and
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meet
others,
rather
it has made it more convenient and frequent.

While the advancement of technology might scale back in personal contact to
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extent for a short term, the web can, in fact, enable the present and future generations to become more
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polarised
towards seeing siblings, parents and mates in the long run. This can be
easily
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visualised
by taking into account that if we are to sustain the net as a tool to deliver our emotions and beliefs to the world,
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we will need to picture proof gatherings, celebrations and
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events
thereby obviating the need for
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face
to
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face
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communication
.
Secondly
, it is a well-acknowledged fact that 'the human is a social being' and it is to the credit of this physical presence that we as a species are able to harness long-term relationships,
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its value cannot
be undermined
for times to
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come
. Mere endorsing words of
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good
character by texts cannot inculcate the right kind of virtue, thereby
further
laying emphasis on human presence for future
is required
.

To conclude
, by seeing both sides of the spectrum, it is
clearly
evident that the internet and text messaging will not
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make
the
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to
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communication
a footnote of the past.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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