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With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree? v.3

With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. v. 3
Nowadays, at the age of technology and internet connection, face to face meetings appear to be more infrequent. To save time, more and more people prefer online messaging to live chats. But could web-technologies completely erase human relations and replace old-fashioned meetings at all? Obviously, online talk has a lot of advantages like real-time connection. Moreover, it is the easiest thing to call someone and know how things are going. Besides that, people, in general, do not live and work in the city they were born and grown-up. This day’s major amount of pals has an opportunity to study and work abroad, which causes of lack of personal communication with relatives. Furthermore, online messaging is highly useful for work purpose, where you should be always in the stream and be able to answer in no time. In spite of this, personal contact has an advantage that would never be replaced by any type of technology. It is personal feelings and human reactions. For sure, emotions are an essential feature that makes personal business meetings more effective and time with relatives more adorable and charming. You will never regret it if you prefer outgoing activities with close people to messaging them. To make things clear, I could say that web-messaging starts to be a huge part of our life. But it is rather the additional option of conversation with people where you do not need to share emotions than replacement of the personal meetings where emotions are highly urgent.
Nowadays, at the age of technology and internet connection, face to face
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meetings
appear to be more infrequent. To save time, more and more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
prefer online messaging to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
chats.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
could web-technologies completely erase human relations and replace
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
-fashioned
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meetings
at all?

Obviously
, online talk has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
advantages like real-time connection.
Moreover
, it is the easiest thing to call someone and know how things are going.
Besides
that,
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people
,
in general
, do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
and work in the city they
were born
and grown-up. This day’s major amount of pals has an opportunity to study and work abroad, which causes of lack of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personal
communication with relatives.
Furthermore
, online messaging is
highly
useful for work purpose, where you should be always in the stream and be able to answer in no time.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
In spite of
this,
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personal
contact has an advantage that would never
be replaced
by any type of technology. It is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personal
feelings and human reactions. For sure, emotions are an essential feature that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personal
business
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meetings
more effective and time with relatives more adorable and charming. You will never regret it if you prefer outgoing activities with close
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to messaging them.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
things
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
, I could say that web-messaging
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
to be a huge part of our life.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
it is
rather
the additional option of conversation with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
where you do not need to share emotions than replacement of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meetings
where emotions are
highly
urgent.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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