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With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text message, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree? v.2

With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text message, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. v. 2
Nowadays, the population of using new technology for instance, internet, social media and text messaging increasing day by day. People are aware about to use this technology plays the vital role in current time. Higher number of population proportion can access the high number of new technologies. It is argued that in the modern age, people has been using new communication techniques for interacting with relatives and friends rather than face to face interactions, however, I agree this with the statement people need to use the new technology for interaction with others. There are lots of benefits for accessing internet overwhelming than negative aspects. Firstly, with this technology helps us to interact others within a second without spending any more costs. It saves valuable time and share all thing within a minute. Moreover, people are more aware about the latest technique and technology. They know that how technology make a life easier from the complex one. For example, Facebook is most easier social networking media where we can chat with friends, share photos, doing video chatting and etc. Additionally, we can interact more than one person at one time and share them with our views and thoughts. Also, People using this technology for advertisement they can promote their product easily and increase the popularity of the brands. Although, there are some drawbacks of this technology, sometimes it may difficult to keep a privacy. Some of the children and younger spend more time on social media and internet that really effects on their education. Therefore, the communicating via internet and text makes easier to interact & communicate easily. On the other hands, face to face communication also is beneficial to the humankind. People can get an opportunity to meet new people, helps to increase the skills, interaction capacity and build up the confidence level. This method people can share the accurate and relevant information. Also, people became more active while they meet new and knowledgeable people, however, its takes more time while waiting and interacting people. Moreover, people could suffer from some rampant diseases while meet with new people. In conclusion, communicating with new technology via internet and test message has more benefit than face to face interactions. People easily share their thought, views and ideas to others without spending more time and money. Using new technology make a life easier human. So that, communicating with people from internet and text is far better option than direct interactions.
Nowadays, the population of using
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new
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technology
for instance
, internet, social media and text messaging increasing day by day.
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are aware about to
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use
this
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technology
plays the vital role in
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current
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time
. Higher number of population proportion can access the high number of
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new
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technologies
. It
is argued
that in the modern age,
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people
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has
been using
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new
communication techniques for interacting with relatives and friends
rather
than
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face
to
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face
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interactions
,
however
, I
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agree
this with the statement
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people
need to
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use
the
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new
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technology
for
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interaction
with others. There are lots of benefits for accessing internet
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overwhelming
than
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negative
aspects.

Firstly
, with this
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technology
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helps
us to interact others within a second without spending any more costs. It saves valuable
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time
and
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share
all thing within a minute.
Moreover
,
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people
are more aware about the latest technique and
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technology
. They know that how
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technology
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make
a life
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easier
from the complex one.
For example
, Facebook is most
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easier
social networking media where we can chat with friends,
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share
photos, doing video chatting
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and etc
.
Additionally
, we can interact more than one person at one
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time
and
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share
them with our views and thoughts.
Also
,
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People
using this
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technology
for advertisement they can promote their product
easily
and increase the popularity of the brands. Although, there are
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some
drawbacks of this
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technology
,
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sometimes
it
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may difficult
to
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keep
a privacy.
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Some of the
children and younger spend more
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time
on social media and internet that
really
effects on their education.
Therefore
, the communicating via internet and text
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makes
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easier
to interact
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&amp
; communicate
easily
.

On the
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other
hands,
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face
to
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face
communication
also
is beneficial to the humankind.
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People
can
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get
an opportunity to
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meet
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new
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people
,
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helps
to increase the
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skills
,
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interaction
capacity and build up the confidence level. This method
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people
can
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share
the accurate and relevant information.
Also
,
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people
became more active while they
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meet
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new
and knowledgeable
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people
,
however
, its takes more
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time
while waiting and interacting
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people
.
Moreover
,
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people
could suffer from
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some
rampant diseases while
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meet
with
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new
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people
.

In conclusion
, communicating with
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new
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technology
via internet and
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test
message has more benefit than
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face
to
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face
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interactions
.
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People
easily
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share
their
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thought
, views and
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ideas
to others without spending more
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time
and money. Using
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new
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technology
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make
a life
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easier
human.
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So
that, communicating with
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people
from internet and text is far better option than direct
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interactions
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
61Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text message, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
407 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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