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TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specific r v.2

TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specific r v. 2
Whithout a shadow of the doubt, having a good job plays a vital role in the individual' s improvement and developmen. By having a good job we can make more money and be a confident person. Many people contend that it is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobes, while others believe it is not. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actuaal observation of life have led me to agree that following out parents' job is a wise action. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate my point. The first and possibly the paramount reason is that we live in a world that most of the people do not have a chance to get a good job. In this competitive world we have to grab the spoon. I mean by using our parents' experiences and following their road we can increase our chance in job hunting. Their experince not only assists us to obtain a good job but also we do not have to waste our tom to find a job. As a result, I think people can just choose jobs that are similar to thei parents' job. Another point springing to mind is that our parents in their entire lives have many connections related to their jobs. These connections are our opportunities to obtain a job. We just have to improve our skils and abilities. The more we improve, the great we earn. By being an expert in a determined field and by having connections we are the people who occupy the jobs. Although the mentioned reasons are the first ones cross to the mind as the benefits of choosing our parents' job, but there is a disadvantage, too. There is a possibility we do not have joy in our career, but by considering that making money is more important than joy in a job we can neglect this flaw. So, we just have to manage the situation and see the real world. So, by revaluating the situation we can understand that having a job is a very great opportunity. To sum it all up, it is easy to see the benefits of choosing a job that it is similar to our parents' job. In this way, we just have to use their experiences and their connections to find a suitable job. As a result, there is no need to being worry about future and making money. I hope someday all the people all over the world can have jobs because without having a job they cannot follow their dreams or even buy stuff.
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Whithout
a shadow of the doubt,
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having
a
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good
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job
plays a vital role in the
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individual&
#039; s improvement and
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developmen
. By
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having
a
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good
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job
we can
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make
more money and be a confident person.
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Many
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people
contend that it is better for children to choose
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jobs
that are similar to their
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parents&
#039;
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jobes
, while others believe it is not. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point.
However
, my personal experience and
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actuaal
observation of life have led me to
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agree
that following out
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parents&
#039;
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job
is a wise action. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate my point.

The
first
and
possibly
the paramount reason is that we
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live
in a
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world
that most of the
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people
do not have a chance to
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get
a
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good
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job
. In this competitive
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world
we
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have to
grab the spoon. I mean by using our
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parents&
#039; experiences and following their road we can increase our chance in
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job
hunting. Their
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experince
not
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only
assists us to obtain a
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good
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job
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but
also
we do not
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have to
waste our tom to find a
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job
.
As a result
, I
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think
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people
can
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just
choose
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jobs
that are similar to
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thei
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parents&
#039; job.

Another point springing to mind is that our
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parents
in their entire
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lives
have
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many
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connections
related to their
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jobs
. These
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connections
are our opportunities to obtain a
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job
. We
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just
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have to
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improve
our
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skils
and abilities. The more we
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improve
, the great we earn. By being an expert in a determined field and by
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having
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connections
we are the
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people
who occupy the jobs.

Although the mentioned reasons are the
first
ones cross to the mind as the benefits of choosing our
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parents&
#039;
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job
,
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but
there is a disadvantage, too. There is a possibility we do not have joy in our career,
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but
by considering that making money is more
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important
than joy in a
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job
we can neglect this flaw.
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So
, we
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just
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have to
manage the situation and
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see
the real
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world
.
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So
, by
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revaluating
the situation we can understand that
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having
a
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job
is a
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very
great opportunity.

To sum it all up, it is easy to
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see
the benefits of choosing a
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job
that it is similar to our
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parents&
#039;
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
. In this way, we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their experiences and their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
connections
to find a suitable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
.
As a result
, there is no need to being worry about future and making money. I hope someday all the
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people
all over the
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world
can have
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jobs
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because
without
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having
a
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job
they cannot follow their dreams or even
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
stuff.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
48Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specific r v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
448 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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