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With a growing world population one of the most pressing issue is that of feeding such large number of people. Some people think that GM food a viable solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

With a growing world population one of the most pressing issue is that of feeding such large number of people. Some people think that GM food a viable solution. v. 1
With the increasing population across the world, it is important to consider how to feed such large populace. Many people argue that GM food can be a solution to this problem, and I tend to agree with them. This essay is going to explain my views with relevant examples. Firstly, one important advantage of GM foods is that they can produce a greater yield. This is because GM seeds are usually genetically modified to be resistant to several diseases and insects. For example, but cotton, a GM seed, is resistant to diseases as it produces a bacteria that acts as a shield for the disease-causing germs. If we did not use GM, then there might not be enough produce to satisfy the population demands, as naturally grown plants are not resistant to diseases. Furthermore, the genes of a fruit or a vegetable can be modified to increase its size, and also nutrition value. This can be helpful as a single plant can produce much larger fruits thus effectively increasing the yield. For instance, a single apple, which is double the size of naturally produced one, from these plants can suffice a person who usually consumes more than one. Conversely, if we depend on natural produce, it can lead to food scarcity as natural plants cannot produce the quantity produced by GM plants. In conclusion, GM food provides the advantage of increased yield, size and nutritional value, and in my opinion, can be a possible alternative for naturally grown food to meet the demands of ever-increasing population growth.
With the increasing population across the world, it is
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important
to consider how to feed such large populace.
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Many
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people
argue that GM
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food
can be a solution to this problem, and I tend to
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agree
with them. This essay is going to
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explain
my views with relevant examples.

Firstly
, one
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important
advantage of GM
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foods
is that they can
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produce
a greater yield. This is
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because
GM seeds are
usually
genetically
modified to be resistant to several diseases and insects.
For example
,
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but
cotton, a GM seed, is resistant to diseases as it
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produces
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a bacteria
that acts as a shield for the disease-causing germs. If we did not
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use
GM, then there might not be
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enough
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produce
to satisfy the population demands, as
naturally
grown
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plants
are not resistant to diseases.

Furthermore
, the genes of a fruit or a vegetable can
be modified
to increase its size, and
also
nutrition value. This can be helpful as a single
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plant
can
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produce
much larger fruits
thus
effectively
increasing the yield.
For instance
, a single apple, which is double the size of
naturally
produced one, from these
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plants
can suffice a person who
usually
consumes more than one.
Conversely
, if we depend on natural
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produce
, it can lead to
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food
scarcity as natural
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plants
cannot
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produce
the quantity produced by GM plants.

In conclusion
, GM
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food
provides the advantage of increased yield, size and nutritional value, and in my opinion, can be a possible alternative for
naturally
grown
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food
to
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meet
the demands of ever-increasing population growth.
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IELTS essay With a growing world population one of the most pressing issue is that of feeding such large number of people. Some people think that GM food a viable solution. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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