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With the growing world population one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM food offers available solution to this problem To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

With the growing world population one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM food offers available solution to this problem v. 1
As the world population increases everyday, meeting the dietary needs of everyone could be challenging. It is thought by many people that genetically engineered foods will help tackle this problem of scarcity. In my opinion, the genetically modified crops can be an inexpensive alternative to organic food, but however, I believe that, it threatens our health. It is true that our world is densely populated, and finding feed for everybody could be difficult. In this regard, GM food might come in handy. More than %60 of the world population suffering from poverty. In other words, many families earn just a fraction of money and for this reason it is almost impossible for them to afford organic foods which are quite costly. Furthermore, it is partly nutritious and tasty. Thereby, this kind of nutrition serves as a vital option. For example, a research conducted in 2015 suggests that, famine and scarcity are curbed to some extent, mostly in Africa with the prevalence of GM crops. On the flip side, some scientists warn us to beware of the detrimental health impacts of these gene-altered foods. This alternative can cause cancer, increased risk of heart problems and allergic reactions. Moreover, experiments on human are still going on. In conclusion, we live in a complex place in which many people suffer from poor living conditions. I believe that, bio-engineered nourishment can be a solution as it is cheap. However, testing on humans still have not been completed, and there is a high risk of fatal disease caused from it.
As the world population increases
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everyday
, meeting the dietary needs of everyone could be challenging. It is
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thought
by
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many
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people
that
genetically
engineered
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foods
will
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help
tackle this problem of scarcity. In my opinion, the
genetically
modified crops can be an inexpensive alternative to organic
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food
,
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but
however
, I believe that, it threatens our health.

It is true that our world is
densely
populated, and finding feed for everybody could be difficult. In this regard, GM
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food
might
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come
in handy. More than %60 of the world population suffering from poverty.
In other words
,
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many
families earn
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just
a fraction of money and
for this reason
it is almost impossible for them to afford organic
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foods
which are quite costly.
Furthermore
, it is partly nutritious and tasty. Thereby, this kind of nutrition serves as a vital option.
For example
,
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a research
conducted in 2015 suggests that, famine and scarcity
are curbed
to
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some
extent,
mostly
in Africa with the prevalence of GM crops.

On the flip side,
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some
scientists warn us to beware of the detrimental health impacts of these gene-altered
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
. This alternative can cause cancer, increased
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of heart problems and allergic reactions.
Moreover
, experiments on human are
still
going on.

In conclusion
, we
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live
in a complex place in which
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many
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people
suffer from poor living conditions. I believe that, bio-engineered nourishment can be a solution as it is
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cheap
.
However
, testing on humans
still
have not
been completed
, and there is a high
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risk
of fatal disease caused from it.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay With the growing world population one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM food offers available solution to this problem v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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