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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.29

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 29
Governments all around the world invest a lot of money towards public health services, to make medical care cheap and easily accessible to the common public. However, certain treatments are quite expensive and may not be covered within the government's health insurance scheme. In spite of peer demand to make well-being services free for all, in my opinion, the government should strive to provide all possible treatment facilities to its citizens, rather than aiming for cost free fitness services. Many, on one hand, would argue that since they are paying their share of taxes towards the administration, it is their responsibility to provide easy, accessible and free medical services as a part of public service. Because, doing so, would enable the poorer sections of the society to take medical assistance and stay fit. For example, the Canadian Government has launched it's own public health insurance scheme under which all its citizens are entitled to free hospitalization. However, making these services free, at the cost of less advance medical techniques, is unwise. Due to the rapid development in the field of medical science, many new and advance methods of testing, diagnosis and medication have been developed and previously incurable diseases can now be cured. However, this research comes at a high price tag. The governments should work towards bringing such technologies in their countries so that its citizen can benefit out of it. For instance, after the US developed a cure for the cancer, the Indian Government hastily worked towards bringing the machinery for treatment in the country and installed them in four of its its premier hospitals so that the public can reap its benefits. In summary, even though the taxpayer community of the country must be entitled to free well-being services, depriving them from the latest methods of medication, just because they are expensive, is not at all agreeable. In my opinion, it is much more important for the authorities to work towards providing all available forms of medical help for the people, rather than making it cost free.
Governments
all around the world invest
a lot of
money towards
public
health
services
, to
make
medical
care
cheap
and
easily
accessible to the common
public
.
However
, certain treatments are quite expensive and may not
be covered
within the
government
's health insurance scheme.
In spite of
peer demand to
make
well-being
services
free
for all, in my opinion, the
government
should strive to provide all possible treatment facilities to its citizens,
rather
than aiming for cost
free
fitness services.

Many
, on one hand, would argue that since they are paying their share of taxes towards the administration, it is their responsibility to provide easy, accessible and
free
medical
services
as a part of
public
service
.
Because
, doing
so
, would enable the poorer sections of the society to take
medical
assistance and stay fit.
For example
, the Canadian
Government
has launched
it's
own
public
health insurance scheme under which all its citizens
are entitled
to
free
hospitalization.
However
, making these
services
free
, at the cost of less advance
medical
techniques, is unwise.

Due to the rapid development in the field of
medical
science,
many
new and advance methods of testing, diagnosis and medication have
been developed
and previously incurable diseases can
now
be cured
.
However
, this research
comes
at a high price tag. The
governments
should work towards bringing such technologies in their countries
so
that its citizen can benefit out of it.
For instance
, after the US developed a cure for the cancer, the Indian
Government
hastily
worked towards bringing the machinery for treatment in the country and installed them in four of
its its
premier hospitals
so
that the
public
can reap its benefits.

In summary,
even though
the taxpayer community of the country
must
be entitled
to
free
well-being
services
,
depriving them from
the latest methods of medication,
just
because
they are expensive, is not at all agreeable. In my opinion, it is much more
important
for the authorities to work towards providing all available forms of
medical
help
for the
people
,
rather
than making it cost
free
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 29

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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