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Wild animals have no use in the 21st century and trying to preserve animals now is just wastage of money. v.1

Wild animals have no use in the 21st century and trying to preserve animals now is just wastage of money. v. 1
A large number of people possess the belief that spending money to save the wild animals is a waste of national budget as these animals have almost nothing to contribute to the human progress or lifestyle. I totally disagree with this view and strongly suggest that we should try to save wild animals in every way possible. It is a ridiculous idea that wild animals have no place in the world because we have entered into the 21st century. I do not believe that planet Earth exists only for the humans and modernization means we need to be more selfish. I would rather say that the 21st century should be the right time to make the planet Earth livable for all species. Letting the wild animals get extinct would be one of the worst steps in the human history and if we do not take initiatives to save those already endangered species, future generations would remember us as a selfish generation. Having said that, we waste millions of dollars on tobacco each day and I would say this is a waste of money. Spending money to protect wild animals is a prudent investment as scientists and ecologists agree that those habitats are important for the human survival. For example, to preserve the wild animals we need to save the forests, plant more trees and stop exploiting nature. This, in turns, saves the human species from being endangered. The human kind should maintain the balance of the ecosystem and invest money in protecting nature and wild creatures is rather a good investment. To conclude, the planet is shared by all the species and as the most intelligent species, as we claim ourselves to be, we need have rather great responsibilities to protect wild animals for our own benefits.
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A large number of
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possess the belief that spending
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money
to
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save
the wild
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animals
is a waste of national budget as these
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animals
have almost nothing to contribute to the
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human
progress or lifestyle. I
totally
disagree with this view and
strongly
suggest that we should try to
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save
wild
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animals
in every way possible.

It is a ridiculous
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idea
that wild
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animals
have no place in the world
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because
we have entered into the 21st century. I do not believe that planet Earth exists
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only
for the
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humans
and modernization means we need to be more selfish. I would
rather
say that the 21st century should be the right time to
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make
the planet Earth livable for all species. Letting the wild
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animals
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get
extinct would be one of the worst steps in the
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human
history and if we do not take initiatives to
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save
those already endangered species, future generations would remember us as a selfish generation.

Having said that, we waste millions of dollars on tobacco each day and I would say this is a waste of
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money
. Spending
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money
to protect wild
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animals
is a prudent investment as scientists and ecologists
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agree
that those habitats are
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important
for the
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human
survival.
For example
, to preserve the wild
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animals
we need to
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save
the forests, plant more trees and
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stop
exploiting nature. This, in turns,
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saves
the
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human
species from
being endangered
. The
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human
kind should maintain the balance of the ecosystem and invest
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money
in protecting nature and wild creatures is
rather
a
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good
investment.

To conclude
, the planet
is shared
by all the species and as the most intelligent species, as we claim ourselves to be, we need have
rather
great responsibilities to protect wild
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animals
for our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
benefits.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Wild animals have no use in the 21st century and trying to preserve animals now is just wastage of money. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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