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Developments in technology have brought various environmental problems. Some believe that people need to live simpler lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.3

Developments in technology have brought various environmental problems. Some believe that people need to live simpler lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. v. 3
The environment has been badly affected by the effects of human activities and associated technology. Some people argue that we should lead simpler lives to reduce environmental problems, while others believe these problems can be dealt with by using modern technology. This essay will discuss both views and draw a final conclusion. On the one hand, living simpler lives could be an effective solution to environmental issues. If people do not depend excessively on technological advances such as motor vehicles and aircraft, environmental problems like noise and air pollution or air pollution will be reduced. As a matter of fact, a generation ago, the environment was in better condition without modern transportation. There is no doubt that motor vehicle emissions are a major cause of atmospheric pollution. In the past, people traveled on foot or used animals for transport, without using fossil fuels which are a cause of much pollution. Moreover, leading simpler lives means that humans will not consume such a variety of products, resulting in less industrial pollution from factories and power plants. Furthermore, with fewer industrial zones, there which be a reduction in river and land pollution, contributing to a greener and fresher environment. Despite less dependence on technology might seem a good solution, in some cases, modern technology could help to tackle environmental problems. Thanks to the technological development, new ways of protecting the environment can be discovered and developed. For example, nowadays, people are able to exploit sources of renewable energy such as wind and solar power which cause no harm to the environment. Moreover, the increase in recycling waste turns garbage into new uses which benefit people’s lives. For instance, millions of bottles are recycled each year and this helps reduce the amount of rubbish accumulated on the land. In conclusion, advanced technologies have environmental advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, people should employ technology wisely to diminish its harmful effects on the environment.
The
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environment
has been
badly
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affected
by the effects of human activities and associated
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technology
.
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Some
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people
argue that we should lead simpler
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lives
to
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reduce
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environmental
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problems
, while others believe these
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problems
can
be dealt
with by using modern
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technology
. This essay will discuss both views and draw a final conclusion.

On the one hand, living simpler
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lives
could be an effective solution to
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environmental
issues. If
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people
do not depend
excessively
on technological advances such as motor vehicles and aircraft,
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environmental
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problems
like noise and air
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pollution
or air
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pollution
will be
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reduced
. As a matter of fact, a generation ago, the
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environment
was in better condition without modern transportation. There is no doubt that motor vehicle emissions are a major cause of atmospheric
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pollution
. In the past,
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people
traveled on foot or
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used
animals for transport, without using fossil fuels which are a cause of much
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pollution
.
Moreover
, leading simpler
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lives
means that humans will not consume such a variety of products, resulting in less industrial
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pollution
from factories and power plants.
Furthermore
, with fewer industrial zones, there which be a reduction in river and land
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pollution
, contributing to a greener and fresher environment.

Despite less dependence on
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technology
might seem a
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good
solution, in
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some
cases, modern
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technology
could
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help
to tackle
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environmental
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problems
. Thanks to the technological development, new ways of protecting the
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environment
can
be discovered
and developed.
For example
, nowadays,
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people
are able to exploit sources of renewable energy such as wind and solar power which cause no harm to the
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environment
.
Moreover
, the increase in recycling waste turns garbage into new
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uses
which benefit
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people’s
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lives
.
For instance
, millions of bottles
are recycled
each year and this
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helps
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reduce
the amount of rubbish accumulated on the land.

In conclusion
, advanced
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technologies
have
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environmental
advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion,
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people
should employ
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technology
wisely
to diminish its harmful effects on the
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environment
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Developments in technology have brought various environmental problems. Some believe that people need to live simpler lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6.5
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