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Why is this happening? What can be done to get locals to visit museums and historical sites more? v.1

Why is this happening? What can be done to get locals to visit museums and historical sites more? v. 1
It is normal that more and more people go to other places to visit museums and historical sites rather than local scenic spots and historical sites. To follow are some causes of why this happens and measures to remedy this situation. People lose interest in local museums and historical sites on account of their low appeal of the attraction. The natives have lived there for many years, so it is more likely that they have visited these places before. And the items in the museum or historical sites are unchanged in general. The locals will feel tired of seeing the same things there and will not go again. However, for foreign tourists, going for the first time, as it is a fresh experience to have a trip to museums and monuments. In addition, people are more and more likely to go to beautiful scenic places so that they can take photos. Therefore, the museums and historical spots are not the best choice for locals. But we can take some measures to solve this problem. The most essential thing administrations need to do is to change the items and methods of exhibition, which can increase the educational character. Even though the cultural relics are not alive, we can use technology to give them life. For example, museums can use AI to demonstrate the working process. They can also set course for visitors, which could give them knowledge of antique workmanship. Besides, decreasing the price is another good way to try. They should also make the sites more artistic in order to attract locals to visit them again. In conclusion, the museums and historical sites should refresh themselves and give visitors a more satisfying experience. They should not be divided into locals and other places’.
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people
go to other
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to visit
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museums
and
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historical
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sites
rather
than
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local
scenic spots and
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historical
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sites
. To follow are
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some
causes of why this happens and measures to remedy this situation.

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People
lose interest in
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local
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museums
and
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historical
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sites
on account of their low appeal of the attraction. The natives have
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lived
there for
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many
years,
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so
it is more likely that they have visited these
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places
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before
. And the items in the
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museum
or
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historical
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sites
are unchanged
in general
. The
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locals
will feel tired of seeing the same things there and will not go again.
However
, for foreign tourists, going for the
first
time, as it is a fresh experience to have a trip to
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museums
and monuments.
In addition
,
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people
are more and more likely to go to
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beautiful
scenic
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places
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so
that they can take photos.
Therefore
, the
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museums
and
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historical
spots are not the best choice for locals.

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But
we can take
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some
measures to solve this problem. The most essential thing administrations need to do is to
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change
the items and methods of exhibition, which can increase the educational character.
Even though
the cultural relics are not alive, we can
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use
technology to give them life.
For example
,
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museums
can
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use
AI to demonstrate the working process. They can
also
set course for visitors, which could give them knowledge of antique workmanship.
Besides
, decreasing the price is another
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good
way to try. They should
also
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make
the
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sites
more artistic in order to attract
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locals
to visit them again.

In conclusion
, the
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museums
and
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historical
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sites
should refresh themselves and give visitors a more satisfying experience. They should not
be divided
into
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locals
and other
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places’
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Why is this happening? What can be done to get locals to visit museums and historical sites more? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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