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Who has been your favorite teacher so far in your life? Use reasons and details to support your answer v.1

Who has been your favorite teacher so far in your life? Use reasons and details to support your answer v. 1
Today, thanks to new technologies being used in public areas like cameras, the rate of different types of offences have been decreased phenomenally and many people welcome this monitoring system for enhancing public safety. Some individuals, on the other hand, believe that the use of cameras in public places has caused citizens’ privacy to be intruded more than before. However, in my view, these devices should be continued to be used in public areas, and their benefits outweigh their probable disadvantages. On the one hand, those believing that installing cameras in the public could be against their freedom have their own reasons. One is that they can be against people’s privacy. As a prime example, in some TV programmes, the plate number of some reckless drivers, who have crossed the line, is shown to the viewers, and this can negatively affect their social prestige because their family, friends or co-workers might have watched this programme. Furthermore, these recorded videos can be misused. In some public premises, there is not an appropriate control on the preservation of data received by these cameras; therefore, individuals’ pictures might be stolen and used for other aspects, including sharing them on the YouTube or other social networks. The feeling someone is always watching is somewhat not accepted by many as they think that a good citizen has a right to enjoy his privacy. On the other hand, despite having the mentioned setbacks, their positive influences are far more prominent. One major benefit is a better control of vandalism by the police force. Obviously, the best source of access to what has occurred during public brawls is monitoring the recorded videos. In particular, the police of Vancouver had been able to arrest those hundreds of vandals, who mainly were Husky fans, ruined plenty of public and private premises in 2011. Had not these cameras been installed in streets, the Vancouver police would not have had any reliable resource to capture these outlaws. In addition, this can assist the judge to track better terrorists. Clearly, numerous of violators can be followed by the order of the court or police annually, while there were no such valuable records before. For instance, in 2013, the police of Boston used these videos and could detect the two boys who were responsible for explosion during a marathon running. We need to keep in mind that the cameras installed in public places are meant to prevent any crime or to detect a criminal. The good citizens have nothing to worry about. However, the monitoring authority should make sure that no misuse of those public cameras is done by anyone in any circumstances. In brief, although some may agree that usage of public cameras can be against the citizens’ privacy, from my perspective, the benefits gained by these devices are far greater. They can be useful for police to detain far easier offenders or terrorists who jeopardise other people’s lives.
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public
areas like
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cameras
, the rate of
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different
types of
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offences
have
been decreased
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many
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people
welcome this monitoring system for enhancing
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public
safety.
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Some
individuals, on the
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other
hand, believe that the
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use
of
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cameras
in
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public
places has caused
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citizens’
privacy to
be intruded
more than
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before
.
However
, in my view, these devices should
be continued
to be
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used
in
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public
areas, and their benefits outweigh their probable disadvantages.

On the one hand, those believing that installing
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cameras
in the
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public
could be against their freedom have their
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own
reasons. One is that they can be against
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people
’s privacy. As a prime example, in
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some
TV
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programmes
, the plate number of
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some
reckless drivers,
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who
have crossed the line,
is shown
to the viewers, and this can
negatively
affect their social prestige
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because
their family, friends or co-workers might have
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watched
this
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programme
.
Furthermore
, these recorded videos can
be misused
. In
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some
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public
premises, there is not an appropriate control on the preservation of data received by these
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cameras
;
therefore
, individuals’ pictures might
be stolen
and
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used
for
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other
aspects, including sharing them on the YouTube or
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other
social networks. The feeling someone is always watching is somewhat not
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accepted
by
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many
as they
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think
that a
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good
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citizen
has a right to enjoy his privacy.

On the
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other
hand, despite having the mentioned setbacks, their
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positive
influences are far more prominent. One major benefit is a better control of vandalism by the
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police
force.
Obviously
, the best source of access to what has occurred during
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public
brawls is monitoring the recorded videos.
In particular
, the
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police
of Vancouver had been able to arrest those hundreds of vandals,
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who
mainly
were Husky fans, ruined
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plenty
of
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public
and private premises in 2011. Had not these
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cameras
been installed
in streets, the Vancouver
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police
would not have had any reliable resource to capture these outlaws.
In addition
, this can assist the judge to
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track
better terrorists.
Clearly
, numerous of violators can
be followed
by the order of the court or
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police
annually
, while there were no such valuable records
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before
.
For instance
, in 2013, the
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police
of Boston
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used
these videos and could detect the two boys
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who
were responsible for explosion during a marathon running. We need to
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keep
in mind that the
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cameras
installed in
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public
places
are meant
to
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prevent
any crime or to detect a criminal. The
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good
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citizens
have nothing to worry about.
However
, the monitoring authority should
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make
sure that no misuse of those
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public
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cameras
is done
by anyone in any circumstances.

In brief
, although
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some
may
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agree
that usage of
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public
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cameras
can be against the
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citizens’
privacy, from my perspective, the benefits gained by these devices are far greater. They can be useful for
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police
to detain far easier offenders or terrorists
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who
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jeopardise
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other
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people
’s
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lives
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Who has been your favorite teacher so far in your life? Use reasons and details to support your answer v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
487 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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