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Do you have a favorite teacher in your school? How have the teacher helped you? Are you still in contact with any of your teachers? Would you like to be a teacher? v.1

Do you have a favorite teacher in your school? How have the teacher helped you? Are you still in contact with any of your teachers? Would you like to be a teacher? v. 1
With the increase in population, industrialization and construction are also increasing rapidly, resulting in polluting water and air. Extreme measures should be taken quickly to stop this. Water and air are two main resources for life on planet Earth, but due to increasing industrialization and construction, their quality is degrading. Industries are polluting the resources on a major level. They release all the toxic products in the air as well as in water. Rivers and ponds that were previously used by the neighborhood villages for water resource, no longer provides clean and fresh water. This is not the only cause, constructing big factories and societies requires huge amount of water usage, also some societies are now-a-days getting built near water sources, that they advertise saying scenic beauty. This is resulting in more water pollution as both concrete and society waste gets dumped into the water. The most important measure that we need to take is to decrease the population. As population is the main cause of pollution on this planet. Less population will lead to less construction. The second measure that could be implemented instantaneously is for the industries to be built outside of cities and there should be regular checks on the industry to ensure that they are not polluting the environment. Also, construction sites should be properly examined by Government officials so that there is no waste going near any water resource and the water that is getting used for the construction site is not wasted in any way. In conclusion, some smart measures should be taken by the Government as well as the industrialists and builders, so that we are not polluting air and water for our selfish needs.
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population
, industrialization and
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construction
are
also
increasing
rapidly
, resulting in
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polluting
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water
and
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air
. Extreme
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measures
should
be taken
quickly
to
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stop
this.

Water and
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air
are two main resources for life on planet Earth,
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but
due to increasing industrialization and
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construction
, their quality is degrading. Industries are
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polluting
the resources on a major level. They release all the toxic products in the
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air
as well
as in
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water
. Rivers and ponds that were previously
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used
by the neighborhood villages for
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water
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resource
, no longer provides clean and fresh
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water
. This is not the
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only
cause, constructing
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big
factories and societies requires huge amount of
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water
usage,
also
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some
societies are
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now
-a-days getting built near
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water
sources, that they advertise saying scenic beauty. This is resulting in more
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water
pollution as both concrete and society waste
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gets
dumped into the water.

The most
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important
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measure
that we need to take is to decrease the
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population
.
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As
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population
is the main cause of pollution on this planet. Less
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population
will lead to less
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construction
. The second
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measure
that could
be implemented
instantaneously
is for the industries to
be built
outside of cities and there should be regular
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checks
on the industry to ensure that they are not
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polluting
the environment.
Also
,
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construction
sites should be
properly
examined by
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Government
officials
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so
that there is no waste going near any
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water
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resource
and the
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water
that is
getting
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used
for the
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construction
site is not wasted in any way.

In conclusion
,
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some
smart
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measures
should
be taken
by the
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Government
as well
as the industrialists and builders,
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so
that we are not
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polluting
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air
and
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water
for our selfish needs.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you have a favorite teacher in your school? How have the teacher helped you? Are you still in contact with any of your teachers? Would you like to be a teacher? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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