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While some people think that the problem with education in poor countries is the teaching methodology used, others believe it is the lack of resources that is the real issue. Discuss both sides. v.1

While some people think that the problem with education in poor countries is the teaching methodology used, others believe it is the lack of resources that is the real issue. v. 1
A particular section of individuals believes that the primary issue associated with the education system of developing nations is the methods of teaching, whereas others opine that shortage of teaching resources is the main concern. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss both the perspectives. The way of teaching in developing countries is totally different from that in developed nations. Firstly, poor countries use the traditional method of teaching that comprises of lecturing. In this method, the teacher delivers the lecture to a group of students and the group contains students of various intellectual levels. Hence, certain topics could be difficult for some students to understand. Secondly, the students find this method boring and lose their interest in their studies. To elaborate, sometimes students fall asleep in the class as there is no interaction between the teacher and the students. Lastly, due to low wages the teachers do not want to take any effort to teach the students. On the other hand, lack of teaching resources is also a crucial problem in developing countries. There are numerous sophisticated devices which enhance teaching and learning. However, these are not affordable for the poor countries. Moreover, the internet is an essential component of the modern education, but due to its cost some poor countries cannot make it accessible in all the parts of their nation. Apart from this, the government of poor countries is not capable of providing some other amenities such as transportation, libraries and school buildings as they do not have enough money resources. In conclusion, conservative teaching methodology and insufficient resources which pose a negative impact on the education system are the reasons for the low economic status of poor nations.
A particular section of individuals believes that the primary issue associated with the education system of developing
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is the
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methods
of
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teaching
, whereas others opine that shortage of
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teaching
resources is the main concern. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss both the perspectives.

The way of
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teaching
in developing
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countries
is
totally
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different
from that in developed
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nations
.
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,
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poor
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countries
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use
the traditional
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method
of
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teaching
that
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comprises of
lecturing. In this
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method
, the teacher delivers the lecture to a group of
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students
and the group contains
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students
of various intellectual levels.
Hence
, certain topics could be difficult for
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some
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students
to understand.
Secondly
, the
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students
find this
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method
boring and lose their interest in their studies. To elaborate,
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sometimes
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students
fall asleep in the
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class
as there is no interaction between the teacher and the
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students
.
Lastly
, due to low wages the teachers do not want to take any effort to teach the students.

On the other hand
, lack of
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teaching
resources is
also
a crucial problem in developing
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countries
. There are numerous sophisticated devices which enhance
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teaching
and learning.
However
, these are not affordable for the
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poor
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countries
.
Moreover
, the internet is an essential component of the modern education,
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due to its cost
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some
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poor
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cannot
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make
it accessible in all the parts of their
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nation
. Apart from this, the
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government
of
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poor
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countries
is not capable of providing
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some
other amenities such as transportation, libraries and school buildings as they do not have
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enough
money resources.

In conclusion
, conservative
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teaching
methodology and insufficient resources which pose a
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negative
impact on the education system are the reasons for the low economic status of
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poor
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nations
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay While some people think that the problem with education in poor countries is the teaching methodology used, others believe it is the lack of resources that is the real issue. v. 1

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4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
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