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Which would you choose a higher pay job with long hours or an average pay job with normal work hours Explain your choice using specific reasons and details v.2

Which would you choose a higher pay job with long hours or an average pay job with normal work hours Explain your choice using specific reasons and details v. 2
The world is rapidly developing, and correspondingly, the importance of personal quality can never be exaggerated. when it comes to a controversial issue about whether the honesty is the most significant character of a student organization, people hold different views, depending on personal experience, personality types and emotional concerns. As for me, I think obsessive honesty is not good for anybody. Admittedly, honesty is usually appreciated as a great virtue, because with which it easier for an organization to succeed. An honest person can gain trust easily from others, so other team members are willing to follow. With this strong bond established, the work that the honesty one distributed will be completed quite well. however, to say honesty is the most important character is definitely an overstatement. obsessive honesty can lead to harm to oneself and even the team or club. Why is this so? if a person is honest with his competitor, the opposite party will know the secret plan. With the plan leaked, the precious fruits will be plagiarized, causing catastrophic results to the whole organization. In this regard, I will refer to myself. when I was a freshman in the Science club in my fresh year, I mentioned it by accident to my best friend lisa that my club needed some rabbits for the physiology experience. however, I ignored that lisa had joined in the Nature club, one of our competitive organizations. With the plan leaked by lisa, our competitor bought all the amount of rabbits we needed. As a result, our experience had to stop, which just put our club back at square one. And each time after, when I saw lisa again, there was a certain embarrassment between us. From my perspective, being responsible should be a more crucial factor for an organization or club. it is clear that a responsible person can help to maintain the stability of a team. when some errors happened, if a member does not admit the mistake himself, it is actually equal to not taking the responsibility for his own behavior. Then how would the rest of the team be willing to work for the person? how could the person keep the cohesion of the entire group? my best friend oliver worked in the students’ Union club for about one year when entering Wu Han University. And according to him, whenever the students complained about the burden of working, the president always attributed the problem to other team members; he never checked on whether there was something wrong with his arrangement of the work time. Gradually, the group members felt so disappointed that they started to seek for opportunities in other students’ clubs. Last time when I met oliver, he told me that he was ready to leave, and he did not feel sorry at all. my idea is thus quite clear: a successful organization should have a group of responsible members rather than some honest ones.
The world is
rapidly
developing, and
correspondingly
, the importance of personal quality can never
be exaggerated
.
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when
it
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comes
to a controversial issue about whether the
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honesty
is the most significant character of a
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student
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organization
,
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people
hold
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different
views, depending on personal experience, personality types and emotional concerns. As for me, I
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think
obsessive
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honesty
is not
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good
for anybody.

Admittedly
,
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honesty
is
usually
appreciated as a great virtue,
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because
with which
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it
easier for an
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organization
to succeed. An honest
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person
can gain trust
easily
from others,
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so
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other
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team
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members
are willing to follow. With this strong bond established, the work that the
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honesty
one distributed will
be completed
quite well.
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however
, to say
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honesty
is the most
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important
character is definitely an overstatement.
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obsessive
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honesty
can lead to harm to oneself and even the
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team
or
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club
. Why is this
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so
?
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if
a
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person
is honest with his competitor, the opposite party will know the secret plan. With the plan leaked, the precious fruits will
be plagiarized
, causing catastrophic results to the whole
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organization
. In this regard, I will refer to myself.
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when
I was a freshman in the Science
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club
in my fresh year, I mentioned it by accident to my best friend
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lisa
that my
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club
needed
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some
rabbits for the physiology experience.
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however
, I
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ignored
that
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lisa
had
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joined
in the Nature
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club
, one of our competitive
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organizations
. With the plan leaked by
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lisa
, our competitor
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bought
all the amount of rabbits we needed.
As a result
, our experience had to
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stop
, which
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just
put our
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club
back at square one. And each time after, when I
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saw
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lisa
again, there was a certain embarrassment between us.

From my perspective, being responsible should be a more crucial factor for an
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organization
or
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club
.
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it
is
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clear
that a responsible
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person
can
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help
to maintain the stability of a
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team
.
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when
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some
errors happened, if a
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member
does not admit the mistake himself, it is actually equal to not taking the responsibility for his
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own
behavior. Then how would the rest of the
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team
be willing to work for the
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person
?
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how
could the
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person
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keep
the cohesion of the entire group?
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my
best friend
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oliver
worked in the
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students’
Union
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club
for about one year when entering Wu Han University. And according to him, whenever the
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students
complained about the burden of working, the president always attributed the problem to
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other
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team
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members
; he never
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checked
on whether there was something
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wrong
with his arrangement of the work time.
Gradually
, the group
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members
felt
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so
disappointed that they
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started
to seek for opportunities in
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other
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students’
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clubs
. Last time when I met
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oliver
, he
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told
me that he was ready to
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leave
, and he did not feel sorry at all.

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my
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idea
is
thus
quite
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clear
: a successful
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organization
should have a group of responsible
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members
rather
than
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some
honest ones.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Mistakes

IELTS essay Which would you choose a higher pay job with long hours or an average pay job with normal work hours Explain your choice using specific reasons and details v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
488 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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