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Which of the following technological developments has made the greatest impact on students’ lives? (1) Electronic books (2) Online classes (3) Smart phones v.1

Which of the following technological developments has made the greatest impact on students’ lives? (1) Electronic books (2) Online classes (3) Smart phones v. 1
From the perspective of some people, children can live independently far from their homes for studies, job. Others, however, hold the view that the teenagers should live with their family. In my opinion, teenage students should have the independence of living away from home for their career. The following essay will further elaborate both sides and draw a plausible conclusion. Opponents of children’s independence of living away from home argue for a reason. A young person living away from home may get involved with the bad surroundings. In other words, he may attract towards the bad habits such as, smoking, tobacco, gambling. This particular age is an innocent age in which these teenagers do not have the understanding of correct and incorrect. I. e. What is bad for their future. For instance, in a recent survey conducted in the cosmopolitan cities of India. Survey says many people living in a hostel, rental flat and as a paying guest in these cities are addicted more to smoking than the other people. Because of this, many parents do not allow their children to stay away from home. On the other hand, young people must have the independence of living away from the home as for their bright future and career. Many of them are students or job seekers, these teenagers need a good platform for presenting their knowledge and skills. Students have to live away from home there for specialised higher studies as those courses are often taught in metro cities consequently, they achieve a great success in their own field and contribute in countries growth. In addition to this, a teenager living away from home experiences more in life than the others who live with family. He has to deal with his regular day to day life and has to make his own decisions individually. As a result, this experience helps the person to gain the basic skills and it makes him mature earlier than a teenager who is living at home. Thus, one can conclude that despite having some pitfalls, the benefits of providing independence to children for living away from home are far more than its drawbacks.
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can
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live
independently
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homes
for studies, job. Others,
however
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teenagers
should
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live
with their family. In my opinion, teenage students should have the
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independence
of
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living
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away
from home for their career. The following essay will
further
elaborate both sides and draw a plausible conclusion.

Opponents of
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children’s
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independence
of
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living
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away
from home argue for a reason. A young person
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living
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away
from home may
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get
involved with the
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bad
surroundings. In
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other
words, he may attract towards the
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bad
habits such as, smoking, tobacco, gambling. This particular age is an innocent age in which these
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teenagers
do not have the understanding of correct and incorrect.
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bad
for their future.
For instance
, in a recent survey conducted in the cosmopolitan cities of India. Survey says
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many
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people
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living
in a hostel, rental flat and as a paying guest in these cities
are addicted
more to smoking than the
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other
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people
.
Because of this
,
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parents do not
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allow
their
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children
to stay
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away
from home.

On the
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hand, young
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people
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have the
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independence
of
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away
from the home as for their bright future and career.
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Many
of them are students or job seekers, these
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teenagers
need a
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good
platform for presenting their knowledge and
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skills
. Students
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have to
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live
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away
from home there for
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specialised
higher studies as those courses are
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often
taught in metro cities
consequently
, they achieve a great success in their
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own
field and contribute in countries growth.
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to this, a
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teenager
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living
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away
from home experiences more in life than the others who
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live
with family. He
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deal with his regular
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day to day
life and
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his
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decisions
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, this experience
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helps
the person to gain the basic
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skills
and it
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makes
him mature earlier than a
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teenager
who is
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living
at home.

Thus
, one can conclude that despite having
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some
pitfalls, the benefits of providing
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independence
to
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children
for
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living
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away
from home are far more than its drawbacks.
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IELTS essay Which of the following technological developments has made the greatest impact on students’ lives? (1) Electronic books (2) Online classes (3) Smart phones v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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