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which is the most important room in a house? why is this room more important to you than any other room? v.1

which is the most important room in a house? why is this room more important to you than any other room? v. 1
In many regions, there is a need of new homes, but we are left with an option of countryside to build them. According to some, the protection of the rural area is of utmost importance rather than building new homes. In my point of view, I agree that it is should be conserved because it will lead to the exploitation of an environment. One good reason to save the village from building new residential places is that it will save the environment from various forms of pollution. The construction of new residential buildings will increase the movement of vehicles, in addition, necessary facilities should also be provided for new residents. Hence, there will be exponential growth in a number of motor vehicles causing both air and noise pollution. So preventing new buildings to build at the countryside help in protecting the environment. Another point to consider in order to protect the countryside from building new houses is that the agricultural land would be preserved from getting destroyed. To create new residential places a lot of fertile land is used, for instance, there was an article in the local newspaper that 20% of the farmland in one of the district was used for building new homes and this has caused food problems in that area. The effect of reduced agricultural field is that there will be a decline in the total yield of crops. So protecting the countryside will not see the reduction in the cultivated land and crops. In conclusion, the countryside has to be preserved from building new homes in order to keep it free from pollution and also preventing the flora and the fauna of the region.
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regions, there is a need of
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homes
,
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left
with an option of
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countryside
to build them. According to
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some
, the protection of the rural area is of utmost importance
rather
than
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building
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new
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homes
. In my point of view, I
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agree
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it will lead to the exploitation of an environment.

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reason to save the village from
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building
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new
residential places is that it will save the environment from various forms of pollution. The construction of
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new
residential
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buildings
will increase the movement of vehicles,
in addition
, necessary facilities should
also
be provided
for
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new
residents.
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, there will be exponential growth in a number of motor vehicles causing both air and noise pollution.
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preventing
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new
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countryside
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help
in protecting the environment.

Another point to consider in order to protect the
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from
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new
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is that the agricultural land would
be preserved
from getting
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destroyed
. To create
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residential places
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a lot of
fertile land is
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for instance
, there was an article in the local newspaper that 20% of the farmland in one of the district was
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for
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and this has caused food problems in that area. The effect of
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agricultural field is that there will be a decline in the total yield of crops.
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So
protecting the
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countryside
will not
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see
the reduction in the cultivated land and crops.

In conclusion
, the
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countryside
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has to
be preserved
from
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building
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new
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homes
in order to
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keep
it free from pollution and
also
preventing the flora and the fauna of the region.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay which is the most important room in a house? why is this room more important to you than any other room? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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