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task 3 Starting Monday, October 5, the school is implementing a 30-minute mandatory computer course. All students, except students in the computer programs, are required to take this course if they want to graduate. On Monday September 29, there is a mand v.1

task 3 Starting Monday, October 5, the school is implementing a 30-minute mandatory computer course. All students, except students in the computer programs, are required to take this course if they want to graduate. On Monday September 29, there is a mand v. 1
According to some researchers the future of the world is under threat because of environment, population and education. Unfortunately, our country will also have to encounter these problems in the next decade if proper measures are not taken in time. This essay will discuss how these problems might affect our country and the possible solutions to deal with them. To begin with, the most threatening problems that could arise in coming years are the issue of environment and growing population of the country. Pollution is increasing rapidly in Pakistan mainly because of increasing traffic. For instance, a report released by the Pakistan Environment Department showed that traffic is causing about 70 percent of the pollution in the country. On the other hand, the rise in population will also cause problems for the country in the future as it increases expenses and demands. As a proof, a census in 2017 showed an unprecedented rise of 110 percent in population as compared to the last census due to which the government is facing a lot of administrative problems. Therefore, these two are the main challenges that this country has to face in the next decade. However, there are solutions to solve these problems such as creating awareness and making strict laws. Firstly, the government should teach their public about the consequences of pollution on the environment. For example, they must educate them that it can cause global warming, which is a global threat to the environment. Secondly, the administration has to make laws on the number of children parents can have in the future. If we take the example of China, we can see that they have reduced the population growth from 150 percent to 45 percent by implementing such laws. Hence, by taking these initiatives the authorities can solve these problems. In brief, there is no doubt that there are a lot of challenges in this world to face in the coming decades and we have to show our commitment to overcome these problems by obeying the laws that are made in this regard and by reducing pollution.
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some
researchers the future of the world is under threat
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because
of
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environment
,
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population
and education. Unfortunately, our
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country
will
also
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have to
encounter these
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problems
in the
next
decade if proper measures are not taken in time. This essay will discuss how these
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problems
might affect our
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country
and the possible solutions to deal with them.

To
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begin
with, the most threatening
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problems
that could arise in coming years are the issue of
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environment
and growing
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population
of the
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country
.
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Pollution
is increasing
rapidly
in Pakistan
mainly
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because
of increasing traffic.
For instance
, a report released by the Pakistan
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Environment
Department
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showed
that traffic is causing about 70
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percent
of the
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pollution
in the
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country
.
On the other hand
, the rise in
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population
will
also
cause
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problems
for the
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country
in the future as it increases expenses and demands. As a proof, a census in 2017
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showed
an unprecedented rise of 110
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percent
in
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population
as compared to the last census due to which the
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government
is facing
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a lot of
administrative
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problems
.
Therefore
, these two are the main challenges that this
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country
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has to
face in the
next
decade.

However
, there are solutions to solve these
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problems
such as creating awareness and making strict
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laws
.
Firstly
, the
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government
should teach their public about the consequences of
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pollution
on the
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environment
.
For example
, they
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must
educate them that it can cause global warming, which is a global threat to the
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environment
.
Secondly
, the administration
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has to
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make
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laws
on the number of children parents can have in the future. If we take the example of China, we can
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see
that they have
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reduced
the
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population
growth from 150
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percent
to 45
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percent
by implementing such
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laws
.
Hence
, by taking these initiatives the authorities can solve these problems.

In brief
, there is no doubt that there are
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a lot of
challenges in this world to face in the coming
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decades and
we
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have to
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show
our commitment to overcome these
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problems
by obeying the
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laws
that
are made
in this regard and by reducing
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pollution
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay task 3 Starting Monday, October 5, the school is implementing a 30-minute mandatory computer course. All students, except students in the computer programs, are required to take this course if they want to graduate. On Monday September 29, there is a mand v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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