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Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.8

Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. v. 8
Nowadays, people suffering from lack of essential life requirements are increasing. However, Many believe that refugee reception by developed countries is the promising thing to do. Although it seems that it is their countries' responsibility, yet I believe it is a glob-level problem, and wealthy countries should help in solving it too. This topic will be discussed in the current essay. In poor countries, many people suffer from being insecure in terms of essential life requirements, obviously because of increased population or civil wars. There is no doubt that food insecurity is one important reason why people in these countries need to be assisted, where dangerous foods reach the tables of the consumers. Moreover, being unsafe along with shelters loss. Clearly, these-countries' governments are unable to perform real solutions, resulting in the majority of the citizens aim at migration to a better place in the world. In wealthy countries, each citizen lives in a secure community. Indeed, the government secures food, accommodation and safety, with having a spare resources for future risks. However, such countries have the ability to assist refugees from poor countries for a better life. On the other hand, it can benefit from the educated individuals as their specialities, while exploiting the less educated ones as labourers in different fields of work. In conclusion, the phenomena of the increasing numbers of refugees remains a heart-touching issue in the eyes of humankind all around the world, in which the whole global need to cooperate to achieve its disappearance all for the benefit of humans.
Nowadays,
people
suffering from lack of essential life requirements are increasing.
However
,
Many
believe that refugee reception by developed
countries
is the promising thing to do. Although it seems that it is their countries' responsibility,
yet
I believe it is a glob-level problem, and wealthy
countries
should
help
in solving it too. This topic will
be discussed
in the
current
essay.

In poor
countries
,
many
people
suffer from being insecure in terms of essential life requirements,
obviously
because
of increased population or civil wars. There is no doubt that food insecurity is one
important
reason why
people
in these
countries
need to
be assisted
, where
dangerous
foods reach the tables of the consumers.
Moreover
, being unsafe along with shelters loss.
Clearly
, these-countries'
governments
are unable to perform real solutions, resulting in the majority of the citizens aim at migration to a better place in the world.

In wealthy
countries
, each citizen
lives
in a secure community.
Indeed
, the
government
secures food, accommodation and safety, with having a spare
resources
for future
risks
.
However
, such
countries
have the ability to assist refugees from poor
countries
for a better life.
On the other hand
, it can benefit from the educated individuals as their specialities, while exploiting the less educated ones as
labourers
in
different
fields of work.

In conclusion
, the phenomena of the increasing numbers of refugees remains a heart-touching issue in the eyes of humankind all around the world, in which the whole global need to cooperate to achieve its disappearance all for the benefit of humans.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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