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Which class would you choose to attend if it is free: 1. improve the skill of public presentation, 2. how to start a small business 3. Improve photographic skill? v.1

Which class would you choose to attend if it is free: 1. improve the skill of public presentation, 2. how to start a small business 3. Improve photographic skill? v. 1
Most of the jobs done by humans can now be done by robots due to advancements in technology. While most jobs done by human labour can compete computers, some people believe that getting this task done by artificially intelligent robots will have its own repercussion. This essay will discuss why the advantages outweigh the disadvantages in this progressive age. Having maximum job done by computers is much more beneficial than using labour force to get the same job done. This is because, machines can perform faster in more velocity than humans can ever be able to achieve. For example, biscuit manufacturing units today, bake, cut and pack tons of biscuits every day at a higher speed than a man could ever have accomplished. Another advantage is that having robots makes it very convenient for people to do their tasks. In this era, most people look for things on the go and book travel tickets online, making it more accessible for people to do it at their own time and space, rather than earlier where they had to stand in long queues to get the same ticket. It is therefore best to have most of the jobs done by use of technology than involve humans in completing tasks. Having said that, some people think that having robots do most jobs can have its own disadvantages. One of the cons is that this will drastically take away employment opportunities for many humans that will endanger the human space. For example, today most petroleum pumps across a few countries are automated and don’t need a human interface to give away petrol or diesel to vehicles at the oil station. This has taken away a lot of jobs of human beings and led to unemployment. Another reason is that if most jobs will be executed by robots then people will become lazier and eventually make them prone to many ailments. For example, if there are robots to do household chores, then fellow humans won't work hard to mop the floor, clean the house or cook in the kitchen. This will take off the struggle that used to keep them physically fit to do daily chores. In a nutshell, the disadvantages are considerable, they don’t stand much value in today’s era as there are successful solutions to these problems addressed by the globe. To conclude, technology today has proliferated to an advanced stage that most jobs done by people can now be done by man-made robots. The benefits of having robots do most of the jobs is the most wanted things that human beings are looking at, it certainly outweighs the disadvantages at all fronts.
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can compete computers,
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believe that getting this task done by
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intelligent robots will have its
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repercussion. This essay will discuss why the advantages outweigh the disadvantages in this progressive age.

Having maximum
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job
done by computers is much more beneficial than using
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labour
force to
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get
the same
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job
done. This is
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because
, machines can perform faster in more velocity than
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humans
can ever be able to achieve.
For example
, biscuit manufacturing units
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today
, bake,
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cut
and pack tons of biscuits every day at a higher speed than a
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man
could ever have accomplished. Another advantage is that having robots
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makes
it
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very
convenient for
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people
to do their tasks. In this era, most
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people
look for things on the go and book travel tickets online, making it more accessible for
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people
to do it at their
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own
time and space,
rather
than earlier where they had to stand in long queues to
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get
the same ticket. It is
therefore
best to have most of the
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jobs
done by
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use
of technology than involve
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humans
in completing tasks.

Having said that,
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some
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people
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think
that having robots do most
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jobs
can have its
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own
disadvantages. One of the cons is that this will
drastically
take away employment opportunities for
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many
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humans
that will endanger the
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human
space.
For example
,
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today
most petroleum pumps across a few countries
are automated
and don’t need a
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human
interface to give away petrol or diesel to vehicles at the oil station. This has taken away
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a lot of
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jobs
of
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human
beings and led to unemployment. Another reason is that if most
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jobs
will
be executed
by robots then
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people
will become lazier and
eventually
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make
them prone to
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many
ailments.
For example
, if there are robots to do household chores, then fellow
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humans
won't work
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hard
to mop the floor, clean the
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house
or cook in the kitchen. This will take off the struggle that
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used
to
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keep
them
physically
fit to do daily chores. In a nutshell, the disadvantages are considerable, they don’t stand much value in
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today’s
era as there are successful solutions to these problems addressed by the globe.

To conclude
, technology
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today
has proliferated to an advanced stage that most
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jobs
done by
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people
can
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now
be done
by
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man
-made robots. The benefits of having robots do most of the
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jobs
is the most wanted things that
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human
beings are looking at, it
certainly
outweighs the disadvantages at all fronts.
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IELTS essay Which class would you choose to attend if it is free: 1. improve the skill of public presentation, 2. how to start a small business 3. Improve photographic skill? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
440 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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