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* Where did about your grow up? * Do you still live there? * What is the famous place in town? * Do you think the area too crowded? * What impact does have on environment? * What should be done to decrease the environment? * How was your home town changing? * Wh v.1

* Where did about your grow up? * Do you still live there? * What is the famous place in town? * Do you think the area too crowded? * What impact does have on environment? * What should be done to decrease the environment? * How was your home town changing? * Wh v. 1
The advancement in technology has brought with it a lot of changes to our ways of life. Nowadays, many young people tend to be addicted to the use of mobile phones and computers. Some people have argued that this has detrimental impacts on their writing and reading skills. I completely disagree with this view, though I accept that it has few demerits. The use of mobile phones and computers have had positive impacts on a lot of youths. Firstly, mobile phones enables us to socialize, thereby curbing depression and boredom. For instance, the social media is a very useful communication tool. Furthermore, one can read different articles on mobile devices, this in turn builds our vocabulary and reading skills. Another major reason why using mobile devices boosts writing skills is from the fact that many young people text one another a lot6. Invariably, texting involves writing. Consequently, it boosts writing skills as well. Some people who believed that this trend has a negative impact on writing and reading, have argued that most keyboards on many mobile devices use the auto correct function. Thereby leading to poor spelling and writing skills. In addition, the addiction that comes with the use of these apparels makes it almost impossible for most people to read conventional books. Hence, their reading abilities suffer. To sum up, this essay has examined both the benefits and drawbacks in which use of mobile phones and computers may have on the writing and reading skills of youths. I am of the opinion that it impacts it more positively.
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reading
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. I completely disagree with this view, though I accept that it has few demerits.

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phones
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enables us to socialize, thereby curbing depression and boredom.
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, the social media is a
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useful communication tool.
Furthermore
, one can read
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different
articles on mobile devices, this in turn builds our vocabulary and
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reading
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skills
. Another major reason why using mobile devices boosts
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writing
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skills
is from the fact that
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many
young
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people
text one another a lot6.
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, texting involves
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writing
.
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, it boosts
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writing
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skills
as well
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who believed that this trend has a
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, have argued that most keyboards on
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mobile devices
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use
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auto correct
function. Thereby leading to poor spelling and
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writing
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skills
.
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, the addiction that
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comes
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use
of these apparels
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makes
it almost impossible for most
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people
to read conventional books.
Hence
, their
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reading
abilities suffer.

To sum up, this essay has examined both the benefits and drawbacks in which
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use
of mobile
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phones
and computers may have on the
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writing
and
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reading
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skills
of youths. I am of the opinion that it
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impacts
it more
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7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay * Where did about your grow up? * Do you still live there? * What is the famous place in town? * Do you think the area too crowded? * What impact does have on environment? * What should be done to decrease the environment? * How was your home town changing? * Wh v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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