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The line chart illustrates the number of crimes occurring in the inner city for nine years, stated in 2003. It can be seen that the burglaries' intrusion into the house had observed a downwardtendency during the investigation time frame while car v.1

The line chart illustrates the number of crimes occurring in the inner city for nine years, stated in 2003. It can be seen that the burglaries' intrusion into the house had observed a downwardtendency during the investigation time frame while car v. 1
It is argued that making information found in research, or another source of knowledge publicly will probably be beneficial for the society and the country. However, some think that some data are critical to be viewed by anyone. In my opinion, Allowing the information to be public is both beneficial to the scientist and the country. Knowledge has many shapes to have all these forms shared publicly is most beneficial to the community. In other words, complex ideas and concepts can raise the awareness of the public. For example, having scientific researches available is an advantage of regular people and also, scientists. Making information accessible will enrich many individuals; consequently, it may result in stimulating new ideas for the benefits of the research. In addition, researches which are made public allow the public to understand its value and mostly increase their support in funding it. Knowledge has many shapes to have all these forms shared publicly is most beneficial to the community. In other words, complex ideas and concepts can raise the awareness of the public. For example, having scientific researches available is an advantage of regular people and also, scientists. Making information accessible will enrich many individuals; consequently, it may result in stimulating new ideas for the benefits of the research. In addition, researches which are made public allow the public to understand its value and mostly increase their support in funding it. result in stimulating new ideas for the benefits of the research. In addition, researches which are made public allow the public to understand its value and mostly increase their support in funding it.
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that making
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information
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, or another source of knowledge
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probably
be
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beneficial
for the society and the country.
However
,
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some
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think
that
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some
data are critical to
be viewed
by anyone. In my opinion, Allowing the
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information
to be
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public
is both
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beneficial
to the scientist and the country.

Knowledge has
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many
shapes to have all these forms shared
publicly
is most
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beneficial
to the community.
In other words
, complex
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ideas
and concepts can raise the awareness of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
.
For example
, having scientific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
researches
available is an advantage of regular
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and
also
, scientists. Making
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information
accessible will enrich
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
individuals;
consequently
, it may result in stimulating new
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ideas
for the benefits of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
.
In addition
,
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researches
which
are made
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public
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
the
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public
to understand its value and
mostly
increase their support in funding it.

Knowledge has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
shapes to have all these forms shared
publicly
is most
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beneficial
to the community.
In other words
, complex
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ideas
and concepts can raise the awareness of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
.
For example
, having scientific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
researches
available is an advantage of regular
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and
also
, scientists. Making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
accessible will enrich
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
individuals;
consequently
, it may result in stimulating new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ideas
for the benefits of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
.
In addition
,
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researches
which
are made
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
to understand its value and
mostly
increase their support in funding it.

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result
in stimulating new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ideas
for the benefits of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
.
In addition
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
researches
which
are made
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
to understand its value and
mostly
increase their support in funding it.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The line chart illustrates the number of crimes occurring in the inner city for nine years, stated in 2003. It can be seen that the burglaries' intrusion into the house had observed a downwardtendency during the investigation time frame while car v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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