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When visiting foreign countries some people think that it is advantageous to learn their cultures and traditions How do u think people can learn other cultures and traditions Why do u think that some people are interested in learning those traditions and v.2

When visiting foreign countries some people think that it is advantageous to learn their cultures and traditions How do u think people can learn other cultures and traditions Why do u think that some people are interested in learning those traditions and v. 2
It is true that acquiring the knowledge of the new cultures and traditions are beneficial for travelers who come from other countries. In my opinion, I believe that people can approach different cultures and tradition from many ways, and there are some reasons why many people suppose that they can be exposed to many exciting experiences from other customs and tradition while others do not want to learn that. On the one hand, there are a variety of methods to learn the foreign’s cultures and tradition. Firstly, the public media as print media and electronic media is the easy pathway to introduce concerning other countries’ tradition and values. Many detailed resources stem from the libraries, the newspapers and the Internet, so they can find anything by them to broaden their horizons. Secondly, if they have enough time and money, they should travel to gain some valuable experience. As I always spend time to travel to another country each year, sometimes by a tour which is included all services that I did not have to worry about anything and sometimes by myself which is demonstrated that I could overcome all obstacles in my trip. On the other hand, there are both negative effects and positive effects when studying about the visiting countries’ cultures. Regarding with advantageous point, travelers can obtain a lot of real experience through participating other nation cultural activities and celebrations. For instance, when they had a chance to travel to Thailand, they could watch the shows of transgender model and claim that they could understand the difficulties of these people. Thus, they would show much more positive attitudes towards transsexual men and women. However, some people don' t appreciate the cultures of the nations where they came to, because they respect their own culture and tradition, especially religion. To be specific, if they are Muslims, they will still wear the traditional outfits even travelling to foreign countries. In conclusion, they can gain valuable knowledge about the other country’s life and tradition through the public media or visiting in this country, and it seems to be that there are some advantages and disadvantages if learning a new nation’s custom and tradition.
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are beneficial for travelers who
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cultures
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people
suppose that they can
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to
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exciting experiences from
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other
customs and
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tradition
while others do not want to learn that.

On the one hand, there are a variety of methods to learn the foreign’s
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cultures
and
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tradition
.
Firstly
, the public
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media
as print
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media
and electronic
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media
is the easy pathway to introduce concerning
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other
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countries’
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tradition
and values.
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Many
detailed resources stem from the libraries, the newspapers and the Internet,
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so
they can find anything by them to broaden their horizons.
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, if they have
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enough
time and money, they should travel to gain
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some
valuable experience. As I always spend time to travel to another
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country
each year,
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sometimes
by a tour which
is included
all services that I did not
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have to
worry about anything and
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sometimes
by myself which
is demonstrated
that I could overcome all obstacles in my trip.

On the
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other
hand, there are both
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negative
effects and
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positive
effects when studying about the visiting
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countries’
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cultures
. Regarding with advantageous point, travelers can obtain
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a lot of
real experience through participating
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other
nation cultural activities and celebrations.
For instance
, when they had a chance to travel to Thailand, they could
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watch
the
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shows
of transgender model and claim that they could understand the difficulties of these
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people
.
Thus
, they would
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show
much more
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positive
attitudes towards transsexual
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men
and women.
However
,
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some
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people
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cultures
of the nations where they came to,
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because
they respect their
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own
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culture
and
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tradition
,
especially
religion. To be specific, if they are Muslims, they will
still
wear the traditional outfits even travelling to foreign countries.

In conclusion
, they can gain valuable knowledge about the
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other
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country’s
life and
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tradition
through the public
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media
or visiting in this
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country
, and it seems to be that there are
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some
advantages and disadvantages if learning a new nation’s custom and
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tradition
.
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IELTS essay When visiting foreign countries some people think that it is advantageous to learn their cultures and traditions How do u think people can learn other cultures and traditions Why do u think that some people are interested in learning those traditions and v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
362 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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