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In recent years, genetic engineering has developed a lot for humans, animals, and plants. Some people believe these developments are necessary, while others regard them as dangerous and advocate a return to more traditional methods. Discuss both points of v.2

In recent years, genetic engineering has developed a lot for humans, animals, and plants. Some people believe these developments are necessary, while others regard them as dangerous and advocate a return to more traditional methods. 2
genetic modification has raised many debates these days. A group of people believes that in the modern world modern techniques such as genetic engineering is crucial, however, others think that altering genes is interfering with nature and might be harmful to human health. In my point of view, acquiring the knowledge of genetic engineering can be a plus and I agree with the first group. On the one hand, genetic modification is necessary for the recent generation. Overpopulation and the threat of food shortage or malnutrition make scientists work on an alternative option for producing more food or more resistant crops by altering their genes. In fact, genetic engineering proved a solution to protect the crops without pesticides or insecticide usage which are harmful to human health as well. For instance, In Bangladesh, genetically modified eggplants help peasants to harvest their crops much more than earlier years. In my perspective, using genetic engineering is beneficial for human these days especially using it in medicine and plant fertility. On the other hand, some people believe that the conventional method of developing food is much safer. they think interfering in natural processes of food production by genetic modification could be harmful and its consequences would influence mankind health dramatically. Environmental degradation, mutation are some examples of the result of altering the genes of plant or animals. So they are in favor of organic food and prefer to consume less genetically modified food because they consider such these foods are healthier. To conclude, while there are several compelling arguments on both sides about the impacts of GMO on human health, I profoundly believe that we should enjoy the scientific discoveries and trust it because even organic foods could be dangerous by poisoning human or in some regions it might cause malnutrition.
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debates these days. A group of
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people
believes that in the modern world modern techniques such as
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genetic
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engineering
is crucial,
however
, others
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think
that altering genes is interfering with nature and might be harmful to
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human
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health
. In my point of view, acquiring the knowledge of
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genetic
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engineering
can be a plus and I
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agree
with the
first
group.

On the one hand,
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genetic
modification is necessary for the recent generation. Overpopulation and the threat of
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food
shortage or malnutrition
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make
scientists work on an alternative option for producing more
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food
or more resistant crops by altering their genes. In fact,
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genetic
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engineering
proved a solution to protect the crops without pesticides or insecticide usage which are harmful to
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human
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health
as well
.
For instance
, In Bangladesh,
genetically
modified eggplants
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help
peasants to harvest their crops much more than earlier years. In my perspective, using
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genetic
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engineering
is beneficial for
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human
these days
especially
using it in medicine and plant fertility.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
believe that the conventional method of developing
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food
is much safer.
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they
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think
interfering in natural processes of
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food
production by
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genetic
modification could be harmful and its consequences would influence mankind
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health
dramatically
. Environmental degradation, mutation are
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some
examples of the result of altering the genes of plant or animals.
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So
they are in favor of organic
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food
and prefer to consume less
genetically
modified
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food
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because
they consider such these
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foods
are healthier.

To conclude
, while there are several compelling arguments on both sides about the impacts of GMO on
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human
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health
, I
profoundly
believe that we should enjoy the scientific discoveries and trust it
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because
even organic
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foods
could be
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dangerous
by poisoning
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human
or in
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some
regions it might cause malnutrition.
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28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In recent years, genetic engineering has developed a lot for humans, animals, and plants. Some people believe these developments are necessary, while others regard them as dangerous and advocate a return to more traditional methods. 2

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