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When talking about success, we often think of people who are rich or famous. In your opinion, what are the qualities that characterise a successful person? Why do you think these should be the criteria? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

When talking about success, we often think of people who are rich or famous. In your opinion, what are the qualities that characterise a successful person? Why do you think these should be the criteria? v. 1
Since time immemorial, a person's success has always been measured by the amount of money he has accumulated over the course of his life. In my opinion, there are some other characteristics that rightly define a human being as being successful apart from just money. These can include the person's virtues of helping the needy people and maintaining a sense of humility while being around all kinds of people. Whether a person is successful in every sense of the word or not, can be judged by his being considerate towards the poor and the needy. If a well-off individual can feed those in help, it can be very beneficial for them. For instance, I have a paternal uncle who donates at least ten percent of his earnings to an NGO that feeds poor children on the streets. Hence, a well established human must endeavour to help the poor people wherever possible. In additon to that, a person's success can be ascertained by the kind of humility he maintains when around other people from different backgrounds. A prosperous man always maintains the same level of dignity with all kinds of humans. To illustrate, a sports personality named Sachin Tendulkar, even after having earned enormous amounts of money and having received appreciation from people of all sorts, remains so down to earth till date. Therefore, it should also be a necessary quality for a famous person to have some modesty towards others. To sum up, only money should not be the criteria for a human to be successful and famous. One's good deeds including benevolence, modesty make one achieve the ultimate level of success.
Since time immemorial, a person's success has always
been measured
by the amount of
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money
he has accumulated over the course of his life. In my opinion, there are
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some
other characteristics that
rightly
define a
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human
being as being successful apart from
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just
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money
. These can include the person's virtues of helping the needy
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people
and maintaining a sense of humility while being around all kinds of
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people
.

Whether a person is successful in every sense of the word or not, can
be judged
by his being considerate towards the poor and the needy. If a well-off individual can feed those in
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help
, it can be
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very
beneficial for them.
For instance
, I have a paternal uncle who donates at least ten percent of his earnings to an NGO that feeds poor children on the streets.
Hence
, a well established
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human
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must
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endeavour
to
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help
the poor
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people
wherever possible.

In
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additon
to that, a person's success can
be ascertained
by the kind of humility he maintains when around other
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people
from
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different
backgrounds. A prosperous
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man
always maintains the same level of dignity with all kinds of
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humans
. To illustrate, a sports personality named
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Sachin
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Tendulkar
, even after having earned enormous amounts of
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money
and having received appreciation from
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people
of all sorts, remains
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so
down to earth till date.
Therefore
, it should
also
be a necessary quality for a
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famous
person to have
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some
modesty towards others.

To sum up,
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only
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money
should not be the criteria for a
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human
to be successful and
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famous
. One's
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good
deeds including benevolence, modesty
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make
one achieve the ultimate level of success.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay When talking about success, we often think of people who are rich or famous. In your opinion, what are the qualities that characterise a successful person? Why do you think these should be the criteria? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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