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When new towns are planned, it is more important to include public parks and sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time into what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

When new towns are planned, it is more important to include public parks and sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time inwith this statement? v. 1
It is very crucial in the time of planning novice cities that what should be the main criteria of that town. It is said that recreational space and sports amenities should be included for public to spend their leisure time instead of high raised malls. I am, holistically, second to this thought due to the fact that people find more interest in spending time in parks and doing exercise than buying goods. First and foremost, when the government thinks to execute a fresh terrain, the priority of entertainment facilities go fast. This is because, people, in general, love to reside those cities which have amusement privilege. For that reason, the authority must decorate the new region with general parks, gym, fitness club, et Cetra in lieu of constructing myriads of shopping malls. The reason is that, for example, if in each nook and corner markets are available, people would tend to shop leaving the thought of spending pleasure time in open space. Furthermore, rarely people show interest in going sports club, if it is not ubiquitous. Therefore, the administrators along with commons people know how pivotal it is to spend in free air rather than sticking on boring shopping. In contrast, if the leader of the rejuvenate realm reckons that retail markets could provide people to spend their idle time in his kingdom, it is wrong idea. Because of its contradictory outcome, people would become gloomy for the absence of natural entertainment and athletic environment even though shopping business boosts the economy of that town. Thinking about leisure activities of public, for instance, in the USA, studies have shown that 99% of town designer think of parks and sports space when they build any cities instead of erecting malls. This, certainly, helps public not only to gain good body and mind but also keep them away from expenses. Moreover, if markets are here and there, people will not be able to spend free time to such places because it will be crowded all the time, so one or two shopping malls are enough. In conclusion, entertainment parks and game club should be built in new town, because here, people can escape from their hectic days instead of going supermarkets. I, totally, agree that shopping malls are not a place of spending entimacy, only parks
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very
crucial in the
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time
of planning novice cities that what should be the main criteria of that
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town
. It
is said
that recreational space and sports amenities should
be included
for public to
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spend
their leisure
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time
instead
of high raised
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malls
. I am,
holistically
, second to this
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thought
due to the fact that
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people
find more interest in spending
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time
in
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parks
and doing exercise than buying
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goods
.

First
and foremost, when the
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government
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thinks
to execute a fresh terrain, the priority of entertainment facilities go
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fast
. This is
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because
,
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people
,
in general
,
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love
to reside those cities which have amusement privilege. For that reason, the authority
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must
decorate the new region with general
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parks
, gym, fitness club,
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et
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Cetra
in lieu of constructing myriads of
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shopping
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malls
. The reason is that,
for example
, if in each nook and corner markets are available,
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people
would tend to shop leaving the
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thought
of spending pleasure
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time
in open space.
Furthermore
, rarely
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people
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show
interest in going sports club, if it is not ubiquitous.
Therefore
, the administrators along with commons
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people
know how pivotal it is to
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spend
in free air
rather
than sticking on boring shopping.

In contrast
, if the leader of
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the rejuvenate
realm reckons that retail markets could provide
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people
to
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spend
their idle
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time
in his kingdom, it is
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wrong
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idea
.
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Because
of its contradictory outcome,
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people
would become gloomy for the absence of natural entertainment and athletic environment
even though
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shopping
business boosts the economy of that
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town
. Thinking about leisure activities of public,
for instance
, in the USA, studies have shown that 99% of
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town
designer
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think
of
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parks
and sports space when they build any cities
instead
of erecting
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malls
. This,
certainly
,
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helps
public not
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only
to gain
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good
body and mind
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but
also
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keep
them away from expenses.
Moreover
, if markets are here and there,
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people
will not be able to
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spend
free
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time
to such places
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because
it will
be crowded
all the
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time
,
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so
one or two
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shopping
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malls
are
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enough
.

In conclusion
, entertainment
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parks
and game club should
be built
in new
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town
,
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because
here,
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people
can escape from their hectic days
instead
of going supermarkets. I,
totally
,
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agree
that
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shopping
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malls
are not a place of spending
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entimacy
,
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only
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parks
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay When new towns are planned, it is more important to include public parks and sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time inwith this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
383 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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